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Mike一家和他的朋友们正在不同的地方度假。假如你是Mike，现在请你根据表格内的提示陈述你们分别正在做什么事情。
要求：
1.内容包括表格内的所有信息，可适当发挥；
2.词数80左右。
范文欣赏
My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family. The weather is cold and snowy. We're wearing hats and thick coats. I'm so glad to see the white world. My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having fun.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach now. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They are all in high spirits.
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，运用所学词汇和句式，通过加工提炼把提示信息有机地整合成为一篇短文。短文包含了题目所有要点，结构严谨、文笔流畅、语言准确，详尽地介绍了哈尔滨和海南的天气状况及Mike的家人和朋友正在做的事情。
在本文写作中，作者能够运用本单元所学词汇、句式，对天气状况及正在做的事情进行具体的描述。如：snowy、glad、playing beach volleyball等词语及"They are all in high spirits."等句式的运用，体现了作者善于运用所学知识进行表达，具有极强的语言运用能力。
Mike一家和他的朋友们正在不同的地方度假。假如你是Mike，现在请你根据表格内的提示陈述你们分别正在做什么事情。
要求：
1.内容包括表格内的所有信息，可适当发挥；
2.词数80左右。
范文欣赏
My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family. The weather is cold and snowy. We're wearing hats and thick coats. I'm so glad to see the white world. My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having fun.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach now. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They are all in high spirits.
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，运用所学词汇和句式，通过加工提炼把提示信息有机地整合成为一篇短文。短文包含了题目所有要点，结构严谨、文笔流畅、语言准确，详尽地介绍了哈尔滨和海南的天气状况及Mike的家人和朋友正在做的事情。
在本文写作中，作者能够运用本单元所学词汇、句式，对天气状况及正在做的事情进行具体的描述。如：snowy、glad、playing beach volleyball等词语及"They are all in high spirits."等句式的运用，体现了作者善于运用所学知识进行表达，具有极强的语言运用能力。
答案
My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family. The weather is cold and snowy. We're wearing hats and thick coats. My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having a great time.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作任务：以Mike的身份写一篇度假主题的短文，需涵盖表格中所有信息，词数约80，时态用现在进行时（描述正在做的事）。写作思路分两部分构思：1. 介绍自己和家人在哈尔滨的情况，需包含地点、天气、活动、感受；2. 介绍朋友在海南的情况，同样包含地点、天气、活动、感受。组织语言时可适当添加细节让内容更连贯，确保不遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 开篇点明身份、同行人员及地点：My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family.
2. 描述哈尔滨的天气：The weather is cold and snowy.
3. 描述家人的活动及感受：My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having a great time.
4. 过渡到朋友的情况：My friends are in Hainan now.
5. 描述海南的天气：It's warm and sunny there.
6. 描述朋友的活动及感受：Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
全文完整覆盖表格所有信息，时态正确，符合词数要求。
【答案】
My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family. The weather is cold and snowy. My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having a great time.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、现在进行时、词汇运用
【点评】
本文以第一人称视角展开，结构清晰，完整覆盖表格中的所有信息点，准确运用现在进行时描述正在进行的动作，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求，展现了对所学知识的灵活运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先明确写作任务：以Mike的身份写一篇度假主题的短文，需涵盖表格中所有信息，词数约80，时态用现在进行时（描述正在做的事）。写作思路分两部分构思：1. 介绍自己和家人在哈尔滨的情况，需包含地点、天气、活动、感受；2. 介绍朋友在海南的情况，同样包含地点、天气、活动、感受。组织语言时可适当添加细节让内容更连贯，确保不遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 开篇点明身份、同行人员及地点：My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family.
2. 描述哈尔滨的天气：The weather is cold and snowy.
3. 描述家人的活动及感受：My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having a great time.
4. 过渡到朋友的情况：My friends are in Hainan now.
5. 描述海南的天气：It's warm and sunny there.
6. 描述朋友的活动及感受：Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
全文完整覆盖表格所有信息，时态正确，符合词数要求。
【答案】
My name is Mike. I am visiting Harbin with my family. The weather is cold and snowy. My father and I are skating. My mother is building a snowman. We are having a great time.
My friends are in Hainan now. It's warm and sunny there. They are at the beach. Some are swimming in the sea. Some are playing beach volleyball. They all feel good.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、现在进行时、词汇运用
【点评】
本文以第一人称视角展开，结构清晰，完整覆盖表格中的所有信息点，准确运用现在进行时描述正在进行的动作，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求，展现了对所学知识的灵活运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
