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假设你是李华,上周日参加了学校组织的志愿者活动,在附近的公园清理垃圾,宣传环保。你的笔友 Eric 对这次活动很感兴趣。请你用英文给他写一封电子邮件,内容包括:
1. 活动目的；
2. 活动内容；
3. 你的感想。
参考词汇:传单 leaflet
要求:1. 要点齐全,语句通顺,意思连贯,符合题意；
2. 词数 100 左右,邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数；
3. 不得使用真实的人名和校名。
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary activity last Sunday,
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是李华,上周日参加了学校组织的志愿者活动,在附近的公园清理垃圾,宣传环保。你的笔友 Eric 对这次活动很感兴趣。请你用英文给他写一封电子邮件,内容包括:
1. 活动目的；
2. 活动内容；
3. 你的感想。
参考词汇:传单 leaflet
要求:1. 要点齐全,语句通顺,意思连贯,符合题意；
2. 词数 100 左右,邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数；
3. 不得使用真实的人名和校名。
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary activity last Sunday,
I'm glad to share my experience with you.
The activity aimed to raise environmental awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30 volunteers took part in it, including students and teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park become cleaner and people listening to our advice made me proud. I realized even small actions can make a big difference.
The activity aimed to raise environmental awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30 volunteers took part in it, including students and teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park become cleaner and people listening to our advice made me proud. I realized even small actions can make a big difference.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary
activity last Sunday, I'm glad to share my
experience with you.
The activity aimed to raise environmental
awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30
volunteers took part in it, including students and
teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish
around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out
leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like
picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park
become cleaner and people listening to our advice
made me proud. I realized even small actions can
make a big difference.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary
activity last Sunday, I'm glad to share my
experience with you.
The activity aimed to raise environmental
awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30
volunteers took part in it, including students and
teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish
around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out
leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like
picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park
become cleaner and people listening to our advice
made me proud. I realized even small actions can
make a big difference.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确核心要求：以李华的身份给笔友写邮件，覆盖活动目的、活动内容、个人感想三个核心要点，词数控制在100左右。第一步先衔接题干给出的开头句，自然引出要分享本次志愿经历的内容；第二步先交代活动的初衷也就是目的，比如提升公众环保意识、维护周边公园整洁；第三步按时间顺序填充活动具体内容，写上午清理公园垃圾、下午给游客发环保传单科普环保知识，逻辑会非常清晰；最后收尾抒发个人真实感想，点明活动收获，注意全程不要出现真实人名校名，用上提示的参考词汇leaflet，保证语句通顺符合日常邮件的交流语气即可。
【解析】
1. 确定基础要素：文体为给笔友的日常电子邮件，使用第一人称，叙事部分用一般过去时，感想部分可搭配一般现在时，贴合表达逻辑。
2. 搭建内容框架：
① 开篇衔接题干给出的开头，补充说明自己很乐意和Eric分享这次志愿活动的经历；
② 点明活动目的：本次活动是为了提升公众的环保意识，同时让附近的公园保持干净整洁；
③ 详述活动内容：说明参与的人员构成，按时间顺序写上午全体志愿者捡拾公园各处的垃圾，下午向游园的游客分发环保传单，讲解日常环保小行动的意义；
④ 最后抒发个人感想：说明活动虽然劳累但非常有意义，自己从中意识到哪怕很小的环保行动也能带来很大的积极改变。
3. 润色调整语句，保证行文连贯，词数符合要求，不出现违规的真实个人信息。
【答案】
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary activity last Sunday, I'm glad to share my experience with you.
The activity aimed to raise environmental awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30 volunteers took part in it, including students and teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park become cleaner and people listening to our advice made me proud. I realized even small actions can make a big difference.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，环保主题表达，一般过去时运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的校园志愿类应用文写作，题干给出的提示要点清晰明确，考生只需要按照指定的三个维度依次展开内容，适当补充参与人数、活动时间分段这类细节就能让内容更饱满，不容易出现要点遗漏的问题，整体考察学生基础的英文叙事和书信表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道题首先要明确核心要求：以李华的身份给笔友写邮件，覆盖活动目的、活动内容、个人感想三个核心要点，词数控制在100左右。第一步先衔接题干给出的开头句，自然引出要分享本次志愿经历的内容；第二步先交代活动的初衷也就是目的，比如提升公众环保意识、维护周边公园整洁；第三步按时间顺序填充活动具体内容，写上午清理公园垃圾、下午给游客发环保传单科普环保知识，逻辑会非常清晰；最后收尾抒发个人真实感想，点明活动收获，注意全程不要出现真实人名校名，用上提示的参考词汇leaflet，保证语句通顺符合日常邮件的交流语气即可。
【解析】
1. 确定基础要素：文体为给笔友的日常电子邮件，使用第一人称，叙事部分用一般过去时，感想部分可搭配一般现在时，贴合表达逻辑。
2. 搭建内容框架：
① 开篇衔接题干给出的开头，补充说明自己很乐意和Eric分享这次志愿活动的经历；
② 点明活动目的：本次活动是为了提升公众的环保意识，同时让附近的公园保持干净整洁；
③ 详述活动内容：说明参与的人员构成，按时间顺序写上午全体志愿者捡拾公园各处的垃圾，下午向游园的游客分发环保传单，讲解日常环保小行动的意义；
④ 最后抒发个人感想：说明活动虽然劳累但非常有意义，自己从中意识到哪怕很小的环保行动也能带来很大的积极改变。
3. 润色调整语句，保证行文连贯，词数符合要求，不出现违规的真实个人信息。
【答案】
Dear Eric,
Learning that you're interested in the voluntary activity last Sunday, I'm glad to share my experience with you.
The activity aimed to raise environmental awareness and keep our local park clean. About 30 volunteers took part in it, including students and teachers. We spent the morning collecting rubbish around the park. In the afternoon, we handed out leaflets to visitors, explaining how small actions like picking up rubbish can make a big difference.
It was tiring but meaningful. Seeing the park become cleaner and people listening to our advice made me proud. I realized even small actions can make a big difference.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
电子邮件写作，环保主题表达，一般过去时运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的校园志愿类应用文写作，题干给出的提示要点清晰明确，考生只需要按照指定的三个维度依次展开内容，适当补充参与人数、活动时间分段这类细节就能让内容更饱满，不容易出现要点遗漏的问题，整体考察学生基础的英文叙事和书信表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
