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“灿烂星空,谁是真的英雄?”做出惊天动地业绩的人是英雄,为追求真理献出生命的人是英雄,在平凡岗位上默默奉献的人是英雄,生活中勤勤恳恳的人也是英雄……你校英语俱乐部将举办题为“My Hero”的征文活动,请你根据下面图示要点,用英语写一篇短文投稿。
注意:1. 短文须包含图示中的要点,可增加细节以使行文连贯;2. 词数80—100。
参考词汇: admire 欣赏;钦佩
My Hero
Everyone has a hero in his or her heart.
审题指导:
1. 体裁:记叙文
2. 时态:以一般过去时和一般现在时为主
3. 人称:以第三人称为主
写作框架:
优秀范文:
亮点词块
①learn a lot from 从……中获益良多
②treat others with respect 尊重他人
③in my eyes 在我看来
高分句子
④ Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
(含Though引导的让步状语从句的复合句)
⑤I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. (含原因状语从句的复合句)
“灿烂星空,谁是真的英雄?”做出惊天动地业绩的人是英雄,为追求真理献出生命的人是英雄,在平凡岗位上默默奉献的人是英雄,生活中勤勤恳恳的人也是英雄……你校英语俱乐部将举办题为“My Hero”的征文活动,请你根据下面图示要点,用英语写一篇短文投稿。
注意:1. 短文须包含图示中的要点,可增加细节以使行文连贯;2. 词数80—100。
参考词汇: admire 欣赏;钦佩
My Hero
Everyone has a hero in his or her heart.
审题指导:
1. 体裁:记叙文
2. 时态:以一般过去时和一般现在时为主
3. 人称:以第三人称为主
写作框架:
优秀范文:
亮点词块
①learn a lot from 从……中获益良多
②treat others with respect 尊重他人
③in my eyes 在我看来
高分句子
④ Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
(含Though引导的让步状语从句的复合句)
⑤I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. (含原因状语从句的复合句)
答案
A hero doesn't have to be famous, but we can learn a lot from him or her.
My hero is my grandmother. She is a kind and wise person. Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. She taught me to treat others with respect.
From her, I've learned to be helpful. She may not be well-known, but in my eyes, she is a true hero.
My hero is my grandmother. She is a kind and wise person. Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. She taught me to treat others with respect.
From her, I've learned to be helpful. She may not be well-known, but in my eyes, she is a true hero.
解析
【分析】本题为英语征文写作题，主题是“My Hero”。解题思路：1. 明确写作要求：需包含英雄的定义（平凡人也可成为英雄），介绍自己心中的英雄，运用指定词块和句型，词数80-100；2. 确定写作对象：选择身边平凡的人（如奶奶），贴合题目中“平凡奉献是英雄”的要求；3. 结构安排：开头点题（英雄不必出名）→介绍英雄的基本情况与品质→说明钦佩的原因→总结升华（她是真正的英雄）；4. 运用给定的亮点词块和高分句型，确保时态、人称正确，内容连贯。
【解析】写作时遵循以下步骤：1. 开篇点题：点明英雄不一定是名人，引出自己的英雄是奶奶；2. 描述英雄品质：用Though引导的让步状语从句说明奶奶虽年迈仍乐于助人；3. 阐述钦佩原因：用原因状语从句说明钦佩奶奶的理由（困难时坚强、教自己尊重他人）；4. 总结升华：点明从奶奶身上学到的品质，强调她是真正的英雄。注意使用给定参考词汇，控制词数在80-100之间，确保内容连贯。
【答案】A hero doesn't have to be famous, but we can learn a lot from him or her.
My hero is my grandmother. She is a kind and wise person. Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. She taught me to treat others with respect.
From her, I've learned to be helpful. She may not be well-known, but in my eyes, she is a true hero.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、英语复合句（让步/原因状语从句）、英语词汇运用
【点评】范文紧扣征文主题，选取平凡的奶奶作为写作对象，契合题目中“平凡奉献也是英雄”的核心定义；结构清晰，层次分明，运用了要求的亮点词块和高分句型，语言流畅自然，符合词数要求，是一篇符合题目要求的优秀征文。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】写作时遵循以下步骤：1. 开篇点题：点明英雄不一定是名人，引出自己的英雄是奶奶；2. 描述英雄品质：用Though引导的让步状语从句说明奶奶虽年迈仍乐于助人；3. 阐述钦佩原因：用原因状语从句说明钦佩奶奶的理由（困难时坚强、教自己尊重他人）；4. 总结升华：点明从奶奶身上学到的品质，强调她是真正的英雄。注意使用给定参考词汇，控制词数在80-100之间，确保内容连贯。
【答案】A hero doesn't have to be famous, but we can learn a lot from him or her.
My hero is my grandmother. She is a kind and wise person. Though she is not young anymore, she always remains ready to help anyone in need.
I admire her, because during hard times, she remained strong and never lost hope. She taught me to treat others with respect.
From her, I've learned to be helpful. She may not be well-known, but in my eyes, she is a true hero.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、英语复合句（让步/原因状语从句）、英语词汇运用
【点评】范文紧扣征文主题，选取平凡的奶奶作为写作对象，契合题目中“平凡奉献也是英雄”的核心定义；结构清晰，层次分明，运用了要求的亮点词块和高分句型，语言流畅自然，符合词数要求，是一篇符合题目要求的优秀征文。
【难度系数】0.5
