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Ⅲ. 基础写作。
人们常说“没有规矩,不成方圆”,合理的校规对于学生的健康成长至关重要。请你根据以下所给内容要点,以“Our School Rules”为题,用英语写一篇短文,谈谈你们的校规。
内容要点:1. 你们学校有哪些校规; 2. 谈谈你对这些校规的看法。
要求:
1. 词数 80 左右;
2. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
人们常说“没有规矩,不成方圆”,合理的校规对于学生的健康成长至关重要。请你根据以下所给内容要点,以“Our School Rules”为题,用英语写一篇短文,谈谈你们的校规。
内容要点:1. 你们学校有哪些校规; 2. 谈谈你对这些校规的看法。
要求:
1. 词数 80 左右;
2. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
答案
Our School Rules
There are many rules in our school. From Monday to Friday, we have to get to school before 7:00 in the morning. We must wear the school uniforms, and I think it is good for us because uniforms can make us look smart. We must listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework after school. We are not allowed to use mobile phones in class. I think the rules are very strict but useful, and we should follow them. However, we have so much homework that we have little free time to do what we love to do. In my opinion, we should have more free time to take part in all kinds of activities and improve our abilities.
There are many rules in our school. From Monday to Friday, we have to get to school before 7:00 in the morning. We must wear the school uniforms, and I think it is good for us because uniforms can make us look smart. We must listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework after school. We are not allowed to use mobile phones in class. I think the rules are very strict but useful, and we should follow them. However, we have so much homework that we have little free time to do what we love to do. In my opinion, we should have more free time to take part in all kinds of activities and improve our abilities.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题是Our School Rules，必须覆盖“列举校规、表达个人看法”两个要点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实人名校名。第一步先开篇点题，直接说明我们学校有不少校规，自然引出下文；第二步挑选大家熟悉的、符合日常校园场景的校规来列举，比如到校时间、穿校服、课上纪律、禁用手机这类内容，避免内容空洞；第三步辩证表达看法，先肯定校规对成长的积极作用，再提出一点合理的小建议，让观点更真实饱满，全程用初中阶段常用的句式即可，不用刻意堆砌复杂长难句，保证要点全部覆盖就可以。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：本文属于夹叙夹议类基础英语写作，使用第一人称、一般现在时创作即可，严格对应两个给定内容要点，控制词数在要求区间内。
2. 结构搭建：
① 开篇引入：直接点明我校存在很多校规，开门见山。
② 主体列举：依次写出几条典型校规：工作日早7点前到校、统一穿校服、课上认真听讲、按时完成作业、课上禁止使用手机，内容贴合真实校园生活。
③ 观点表达：先肯定校规严格但有用，我们应当遵守，再辩证提出当前作业偏多、自主时间少的小问题，建议留出更多时间参与活动提升能力，观点客观完整。
3. 细节优化：用and、because、however、in my opinion等逻辑连接词串联内容，让行文流畅自然，全程不出现真实人名校名，符合题目规范。
【答案】
Our School Rules
There are many rules in our school. From Monday to Friday, we have to get to school before 7:00 in the morning. We must wear the school uniforms, and I think it is good for us because uniforms can make us look smart. We must listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework after school. We are not allowed to use mobile phones in class. I think the rules are very strict but useful, and we should follow them. However, we have so much homework that we have little free time to do what we love to do. In my opinion, we should have more free time to take part in all kinds of activities and improve our abilities.
【知识点】
英语基础写作，一般现在时运用，行文逻辑衔接
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部要点，列举的校规贴合中学生真实校园生活，观点辩证客观，既肯定了校规对学生成长的正向约束作用，也提出了合理的优化建议，行文逻辑顺畅，连接词使用恰当，兼顾简单句和基础复合句，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实个人信息，是一篇非常符合初中基础写作评分标准的优质范文，学生参考该“引入-列规则-谈看法”的结构创作很容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题是Our School Rules，必须覆盖“列举校规、表达个人看法”两个要点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实人名校名。第一步先开篇点题，直接说明我们学校有不少校规，自然引出下文；第二步挑选大家熟悉的、符合日常校园场景的校规来列举，比如到校时间、穿校服、课上纪律、禁用手机这类内容，避免内容空洞；第三步辩证表达看法，先肯定校规对成长的积极作用，再提出一点合理的小建议，让观点更真实饱满，全程用初中阶段常用的句式即可，不用刻意堆砌复杂长难句，保证要点全部覆盖就可以。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：本文属于夹叙夹议类基础英语写作，使用第一人称、一般现在时创作即可，严格对应两个给定内容要点，控制词数在要求区间内。
2. 结构搭建：
① 开篇引入：直接点明我校存在很多校规，开门见山。
② 主体列举：依次写出几条典型校规：工作日早7点前到校、统一穿校服、课上认真听讲、按时完成作业、课上禁止使用手机，内容贴合真实校园生活。
③ 观点表达：先肯定校规严格但有用，我们应当遵守，再辩证提出当前作业偏多、自主时间少的小问题，建议留出更多时间参与活动提升能力，观点客观完整。
3. 细节优化：用and、because、however、in my opinion等逻辑连接词串联内容，让行文流畅自然，全程不出现真实人名校名，符合题目规范。
【答案】
Our School Rules
There are many rules in our school. From Monday to Friday, we have to get to school before 7:00 in the morning. We must wear the school uniforms, and I think it is good for us because uniforms can make us look smart. We must listen to our teachers carefully in class and finish our homework after school. We are not allowed to use mobile phones in class. I think the rules are very strict but useful, and we should follow them. However, we have so much homework that we have little free time to do what we love to do. In my opinion, we should have more free time to take part in all kinds of activities and improve our abilities.
【知识点】
英语基础写作，一般现在时运用，行文逻辑衔接
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部要点，列举的校规贴合中学生真实校园生活，观点辩证客观，既肯定了校规对学生成长的正向约束作用，也提出了合理的优化建议，行文逻辑顺畅，连接词使用恰当，兼顾简单句和基础复合句，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实个人信息，是一篇非常符合初中基础写作评分标准的优质范文，学生参考该“引入-列规则-谈看法”的结构创作很容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
