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七、书面表达满分15分
构建和谐社区、共创幸福生活,这离不开每位居民的付出。阳光中学英语俱乐部现开展"Better Community, Better Life"演讲比赛,请你写一篇演讲稿,从礼仪、环境维度阐述如何打造更美好的社区生活,并结合亲身经历补充其他助力社区发展的方面。
注意事项:
1. 词数不少于90,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
2. 要求要点完整,语句通顺、符合题意;
3. 短文中不得使用真实的个人姓名或学校名称。
Better Community, Better Life
A good community is like a big family. What can we do to build a better community? I'd like to share some ideas.
Let's work together to build a better community and enjoy a better life.
构建和谐社区、共创幸福生活,这离不开每位居民的付出。阳光中学英语俱乐部现开展"Better Community, Better Life"演讲比赛,请你写一篇演讲稿,从礼仪、环境维度阐述如何打造更美好的社区生活,并结合亲身经历补充其他助力社区发展的方面。
注意事项:
1. 词数不少于90,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
2. 要求要点完整,语句通顺、符合题意;
3. 短文中不得使用真实的个人姓名或学校名称。
Better Community, Better Life
A good community is like a big family. What can we do to build a better community? I'd like to share some ideas.
Let's work together to build a better community and enjoy a better life.
答案
七、书面表达
【审题指导】
本文是一篇演讲稿,围绕打造更好社区进行倡议,时态为一般现在
时和一般过去时。写作时应注意不要遗漏信息提示中礼仪、环境、
亲身经历的介绍要点,适当添加细节,突出打造美好社区的行动与
意义。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 表明写作意图。借已给开头引出打造更好社区的想法
第二步 具体阐述写作内容。从礼仪、环境、亲身经历等方面，
说明助力社区发展的做法
第三步 书写结语。呼吁大家共同行动,打造美好社区
One possible version:
Better Community, Better Life
A good community is like a big family. What can we do to
build a better community? I'd like to share some ideas.
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours
with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small
acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up
litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green
environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day".
Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs.
It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities
can strengthen our community bonds.
Let's work together to build a better community and enjoy a
better life.
【审题指导】
本文是一篇演讲稿,围绕打造更好社区进行倡议,时态为一般现在
时和一般过去时。写作时应注意不要遗漏信息提示中礼仪、环境、
亲身经历的介绍要点,适当添加细节,突出打造美好社区的行动与
意义。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 表明写作意图。借已给开头引出打造更好社区的想法
第二步 具体阐述写作内容。从礼仪、环境、亲身经历等方面，
说明助力社区发展的做法
第三步 书写结语。呼吁大家共同行动,打造美好社区
One possible version:
Better Community, Better Life
A good community is like a big family. What can we do to
build a better community? I'd like to share some ideas.
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours
with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small
acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up
litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green
environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day".
Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs.
It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities
can strengthen our community bonds.
Let's work together to build a better community and enjoy a
better life.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇主题为"Better Community, Better Life"的演讲稿写作题，解题时首先要明确写作要求：第一，必须覆盖全部三个核心要点：阐述文明礼仪对打造美好社区的作用、阐述环保相关的社区行动、补充一段自身助力社区的亲身经历；第二，注意时态区分，介绍日常通用做法使用一般现在时，描述过往个人经历使用一般过去时；第三，词数不少于90，不能出现真实个人姓名和学校名称。接下来搭建行文逻辑：先用连接词First引出礼仪相关内容，列举微笑问好、使用礼貌用语等具体小行为，说明这类行为能让社区氛围更温暖；再用Second引出环保相关内容，列举捡垃圾、种树、节水等可落地的环保行动，说明绿色干净的环境能提升所有人的居住体验；最后用Last引出自己的亲身经历，比如参与社区的技能分享互助活动，描述活动内容和带来的拉近邻里关系的积极效果，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾，完成全文。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
步骤1：承接题目给出的开头，首先阐述第一个要点：点明良好礼仪的重要性，列举日常邻里相处的礼貌小举动，说明这些细节能让社区氛围更融洽温暖。
步骤2：接着阐述第二个要点：点明环境保护是打造美好社区的关键，列举普通居民都可以践行的环保行动，说明整洁绿色的环境能让每一位居民居住得更舒适。
步骤3：最后补充第三个要点，结合自身真实经历，介绍自己参与过的社区互助类活动，描述活动的内容和带来的积极影响，说明邻里互助也能助力社区变得更美好，最后衔接题目给出的结尾句。
参考范文内容：
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day". Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs. It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities can strengthen our community bonds.
【答案】
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day". Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs. It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities can strengthen our community bonds.
【知识点】
演讲稿写作，英语时态运用，要点类作文
【点评】
本题属于贴近生活的倡议类演讲稿写作，思维导图明确给出了三个写作方向，有效降低了审题门槛，既考查学生的英语语言组织、逻辑衔接能力，也引导学生树立共建美好社区的责任意识。写作时要注意不要遗漏核心要点，区分通用描述的一般现在时和过往经历的一般过去时，避免出现真实个人信息，适当补充细节可以让文章内容更饱满生动。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇主题为"Better Community, Better Life"的演讲稿写作题，解题时首先要明确写作要求：第一，必须覆盖全部三个核心要点：阐述文明礼仪对打造美好社区的作用、阐述环保相关的社区行动、补充一段自身助力社区的亲身经历；第二，注意时态区分，介绍日常通用做法使用一般现在时，描述过往个人经历使用一般过去时；第三，词数不少于90，不能出现真实个人姓名和学校名称。接下来搭建行文逻辑：先用连接词First引出礼仪相关内容，列举微笑问好、使用礼貌用语等具体小行为，说明这类行为能让社区氛围更温暖；再用Second引出环保相关内容，列举捡垃圾、种树、节水等可落地的环保行动，说明绿色干净的环境能提升所有人的居住体验；最后用Last引出自己的亲身经历，比如参与社区的技能分享互助活动，描述活动内容和带来的拉近邻里关系的积极效果，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾，完成全文。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
步骤1：承接题目给出的开头，首先阐述第一个要点：点明良好礼仪的重要性，列举日常邻里相处的礼貌小举动，说明这些细节能让社区氛围更融洽温暖。
步骤2：接着阐述第二个要点：点明环境保护是打造美好社区的关键，列举普通居民都可以践行的环保行动，说明整洁绿色的环境能让每一位居民居住得更舒适。
步骤3：最后补充第三个要点，结合自身真实经历，介绍自己参与过的社区互助类活动，描述活动的内容和带来的积极影响，说明邻里互助也能助力社区变得更美好，最后衔接题目给出的结尾句。
参考范文内容：
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day". Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs. It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities can strengthen our community bonds.
【答案】
First, showing good manners matters. Greeting neighbours with a smile and saying "please" and "thank you"—these small acts make our community warmer.
Second, protecting the environment is key. We can pick up litter, plant more trees, and save water. A clean and green environment makes everyone feel comfortable.
Last, I once joined in an activity—"Skill-Sharing Day". Neighbours taught each other skills like cooking and DIY repairs. It made us closer and helped solve daily problems. Such activities can strengthen our community bonds.
【知识点】
演讲稿写作，英语时态运用，要点类作文
【点评】
本题属于贴近生活的倡议类演讲稿写作，思维导图明确给出了三个写作方向，有效降低了审题门槛，既考查学生的英语语言组织、逻辑衔接能力，也引导学生树立共建美好社区的责任意识。写作时要注意不要遗漏核心要点，区分通用描述的一般现在时和过往经历的一般过去时，避免出现真实个人信息，适当补充细节可以让文章内容更饱满生动。
【难度系数】
0.6
