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七、书面表达。(8分)
观察 Mary 记事簿上的照片,照片上的人物都在做什么呢？请结合本单元所学的内容描述一下。
要求：1. 不少于40词,不包含所给内容；2. 内容须包含照片所给的所有信息；3. 时态准确,条理清晰,意思连贯；4. 句式丰富,展开合理想象。 Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's ___
观察 Mary 记事簿上的照片,照片上的人物都在做什么呢？请结合本单元所学的内容描述一下。
要求：1. 不少于40词,不包含所给内容；2. 内容须包含照片所给的所有信息；3. 时态准确,条理清晰,意思连贯；4. 句式丰富,展开合理想象。 Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's ___
答案
示例:
Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's
sunny and hot. Mary and her family are having
an outing in the park. Look! Mary is flying a
kite. The kite is flying high in the sky. Who's
the boy riding a bike on the path? He's Mary's
brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.
Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading
a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her. What's
Mary's father doing? He's having a barbecue.
The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.
What a great Saturday afternoon!
Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's
sunny and hot. Mary and her family are having
an outing in the park. Look! Mary is flying a
kite. The kite is flying high in the sky. Who's
the boy riding a bike on the path? He's Mary's
brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.
Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading
a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her. What's
Mary's father doing? He's having a barbecue.
The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.
What a great Saturday afternoon!
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要明确这是一篇描述正在进行场景的书面表达，要确定使用现在进行时（be+动词-ing形式）。第一步，根据图片信息点明天气（sunny and hot）和整体场景（Mary一家在郊游）；第二步，逐个描述图中人物的活动：Mary放风筝、弟弟骑自行车、妈妈看书、小狗睡觉、爸爸烧烤，同时加入合理想象让内容更丰富，比如弟弟认为骑车是锻炼、食物看起来很美味；第三步，用感叹句结尾总结这个美好的下午，确保内容包含所有图片信息，时态准确，句式多样，字数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇点明天气与整体场景：先用“It's sunny and hot.”描述天气，接着说明“Mary and her family are having an outing in the park.”，交代整体活动背景。
2. 分述人物活动：
描述Mary：“Mary is flying a kite. The kite is flying high in the sky.”，补充风筝的状态，让内容更具体。
描述弟弟：用疑问句“Who's the boy riding a bike on the path?”引出，再回答“He's Mary's brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.”，加入人物的想法，丰富内容。
描述妈妈和小狗：“Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her.”，同时描述旁边的小狗，不遗漏图片信息。
描述爸爸：用疑问句“What's Mary's father doing?”引出，回答“He's having a barbecue. The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.”，加入对食物的想象。
3. 结尾总结：用“What a great Saturday afternoon!”感叹，呼应开头的周六下午郊游，让文章结构完整。
【答案】
Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's
sunny and hot. Mary and her family are having
an outing in the park. Look! Mary is flying a
kite. The kite is flying high in the sky. Who's
the boy riding a bike on the path? He's Mary's
brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.
Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading
a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her. What's
Mary's father doing? He's having a barbecue.
The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.
What a great Saturday afternoon!
【知识点】
现在进行时运用，场景描述写作，家庭成员词汇
【点评】
这篇范文严格贴合题目要求，涵盖了图片中的所有信息，时态运用准确，句式丰富多样，通过加入合理的想象让内容更生动饱满，语言流畅自然，很好地完成了书面表达的任务，给读者呈现出一个温馨愉快的家庭郊游场景。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先，我们需要明确这是一篇描述正在进行场景的书面表达，要确定使用现在进行时（be+动词-ing形式）。第一步，根据图片信息点明天气（sunny and hot）和整体场景（Mary一家在郊游）；第二步，逐个描述图中人物的活动：Mary放风筝、弟弟骑自行车、妈妈看书、小狗睡觉、爸爸烧烤，同时加入合理想象让内容更丰富，比如弟弟认为骑车是锻炼、食物看起来很美味；第三步，用感叹句结尾总结这个美好的下午，确保内容包含所有图片信息，时态准确，句式多样，字数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇点明天气与整体场景：先用“It's sunny and hot.”描述天气，接着说明“Mary and her family are having an outing in the park.”，交代整体活动背景。
2. 分述人物活动：
描述Mary：“Mary is flying a kite. The kite is flying high in the sky.”，补充风筝的状态，让内容更具体。
描述弟弟：用疑问句“Who's the boy riding a bike on the path?”引出，再回答“He's Mary's brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.”，加入人物的想法，丰富内容。
描述妈妈和小狗：“Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her.”，同时描述旁边的小狗，不遗漏图片信息。
描述爸爸：用疑问句“What's Mary's father doing?”引出，回答“He's having a barbecue. The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.”，加入对食物的想象。
3. 结尾总结：用“What a great Saturday afternoon!”感叹，呼应开头的周六下午郊游，让文章结构完整。
【答案】
Look at the picture of Mary's family. It's
sunny and hot. Mary and her family are having
an outing in the park. Look! Mary is flying a
kite. The kite is flying high in the sky. Who's
the boy riding a bike on the path? He's Mary's
brother Jack. He thinks it's really good exercise.
Mary's mother is sitting on the grass and reading
a book. Puppy the dog is sleeping by her. What's
Mary's father doing? He's having a barbecue.
The food looks so nice and it must be delicious.
What a great Saturday afternoon!
【知识点】
现在进行时运用，场景描述写作，家庭成员词汇
【点评】
这篇范文严格贴合题目要求，涵盖了图片中的所有信息，时态运用准确，句式丰富多样，通过加入合理的想象让内容更生动饱满，语言流畅自然，很好地完成了书面表达的任务，给读者呈现出一个温馨愉快的家庭郊游场景。
【难度系数】
0.7
