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健康的兴趣爱好会给我们的学习和生活带来很大的帮助。假如你是李华，你正在参与校英文报主题为“My Hobby”的征稿活动。请你根据以下导图提示，写一篇 80词左右的短文。
注意:1. 短文必须包括以下导图中的所有内容，可适当发挥；2. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
Dear editor，
Yours，
Li Hua
注意:1. 短文必须包括以下导图中的所有内容，可适当发挥；2. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
Dear editor，
My hobby is gardening. I started it two years ago. One day, my mum gave me a bag of rose seeds. I was excited and planted them in a big pot in the yard.
At first. I forgot to water them sometimes, and the soil got dry. My mum told me to be patient. Now I water them every morning. Last month, the first pink flower bloomed. It was so pretty!
Gardening makes me happy and teaches me to be careful. I like watching my flowers grow. It's a great hobby.
Yours，
Li Hua
答案
标准提分版:
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening. I started it two years ago. One day, my mum gave me a bag of rose seeds. I was excited and planted them in a big pot in the yard.
At first. I forgot to water them sometimes, and the soil got dry. My mum told me to be patient. Now I water them every morning. Last month, the first pink flower bloomed. It was so pretty! Gardening makes me happy and teaches me to be careful. I like watching my flowers grow. It's a great hobby.
Yours,
Li Hua
进阶优化版:
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening, which I picked up three years ago. It all began when I received a small pot of sunflower seeds as a gift. Watching them grow into tall plants filled me with joy, and soon I started growing more flowers and even some vegetables.
Gardening brings me peace. Watering the plants and removing weeds after a busy day at school help me relax. It also teaches me patience—waiting for a bud to bloom teaches me that good things take time. This hobby not only makes my room beautiful but also enriches my life in unexpected ways.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening. I started it two years ago. One day, my mum gave me a bag of rose seeds. I was excited and planted them in a big pot in the yard.
At first. I forgot to water them sometimes, and the soil got dry. My mum told me to be patient. Now I water them every morning. Last month, the first pink flower bloomed. It was so pretty! Gardening makes me happy and teaches me to be careful. I like watching my flowers grow. It's a great hobby.
Yours,
Li Hua
进阶优化版:
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening, which I picked up three years ago. It all began when I received a small pot of sunflower seeds as a gift. Watching them grow into tall plants filled me with joy, and soon I started growing more flowers and even some vegetables.
Gardening brings me peace. Watering the plants and removing weeds after a busy day at school help me relax. It also teaches me patience—waiting for a bud to bloom teaches me that good things take time. This hobby not only makes my room beautiful but also enriches my life in unexpected ways.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【解析】
这是一篇话题应用文写作，需以李华的身份，围绕“My Hobby”主题，按照导图提示的三个核心要点展开：明确自己的爱好，描述1-2个促成爱好养成的重要事件，阐述爱好带来的积极影响，同时注意控制词数在80词左右，符合征稿的格式要求。
【答案】
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening, which I picked up three years ago. It all began when I received a small pot of sunflower seeds as a gift. Watching them grow into tall plants filled me with joy, and soon I started growing more flowers and even some vegetables.
Gardening brings me peace. Watering the plants and removing weeds after a busy day at school help me relax. It also teaches me patience—waiting for a bud to bloom teaches me that good things take time. This hobby not only makes my room beautiful but also enriches my life in unexpected ways.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
话题应用文写作，英语短文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，完整覆盖导图所有要点，语言表达流畅自然，既清晰讲述了爱好的起源，又点明了爱好带来的积极影响，符合征稿的字数与内容要求，能很好体现健康爱好的价值。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇话题应用文写作，需以李华的身份，围绕“My Hobby”主题，按照导图提示的三个核心要点展开：明确自己的爱好，描述1-2个促成爱好养成的重要事件，阐述爱好带来的积极影响，同时注意控制词数在80词左右，符合征稿的格式要求。
【答案】
Dear editor,
My hobby is gardening, which I picked up three years ago. It all began when I received a small pot of sunflower seeds as a gift. Watching them grow into tall plants filled me with joy, and soon I started growing more flowers and even some vegetables.
Gardening brings me peace. Watering the plants and removing weeds after a busy day at school help me relax. It also teaches me patience—waiting for a bud to bloom teaches me that good things take time. This hobby not only makes my room beautiful but also enriches my life in unexpected ways.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
话题应用文写作，英语短文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，完整覆盖导图所有要点，语言表达流畅自然，既清晰讲述了爱好的起源，又点明了爱好带来的积极影响，符合征稿的字数与内容要求，能很好体现健康爱好的价值。
【难度系数】
0.6
