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你校英语报开展主题为“My Favorite Animal”的英语征文活动，请根据以下要点，写一篇征文参赛。
要点：
1. 介绍你最喜欢的动物，并描述其外貌与习性；
2. 说明你喜欢它的原因；
3. 呼吁大家保护这类动物。
词数：不少于 60 词。
My Favorite Animal
你校英语报开展主题为“My Favorite Animal”的英语征文活动，请根据以下要点，写一篇征文参赛。
要点：
1. 介绍你最喜欢的动物，并描述其外貌与习性；
2. 说明你喜欢它的原因；
3. 呼吁大家保护这类动物。
词数：不少于 60 词。
My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is the panda. Pandas are black and white, with round faces and big black eyes. They look really cute. They mainly feed on bamboo and they need eat it every day. Pandas are kind and slow-moving, and people all over the world love them.
I like pandas not only for their cuteness but also because they are a symbol of China. But to my sadness, there are not so many pandas in China. We should stop cutting down bamboo forests to protect pandas. Let's work together to help them.
答案
参考例文：
My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is the panda. Pandas are black and white, with round faces and big black eyes. They look really cute. They mainly feed on bamboo and they need eat it every day. Pandas are kind and slow-moving, and people all over the world love them.
I like pandas not only for their cuteness but also because they are a symbol of China. But to my sadness, there are not so many pandas in China. We should stop cutting down bamboo forests to protect pandas. Let's work together to help them.
My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is the panda. Pandas are black and white, with round faces and big black eyes. They look really cute. They mainly feed on bamboo and they need eat it every day. Pandas are kind and slow-moving, and people all over the world love them.
I like pandas not only for their cuteness but also because they are a symbol of China. But to my sadness, there are not so many pandas in China. We should stop cutting down bamboo forests to protect pandas. Let's work together to help them.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先审清全部要求：征文主题为“My Favorite Animal”，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数不少于60词，行文要流畅自然符合参赛要求。首先优先选择我们词汇储备充足、大众熟悉的动物（比如大熊猫）来写，避免因生词卡壳。接下来规划行文逻辑：第一步开篇直接点明自己最喜欢的动物，紧接着对应要点1描述它的外貌特征和生活习性，让读者对该动物形成直观印象；第二步对应要点2，从外形观感、文化属性两个角度说明喜欢它的原因，让内容更充实；第三步对应要点3，先点明这类动物当前的生存困境，再顺理成章发出保护呼吁，升华主题。最后通读全文检查语法错误，确认所有要点都覆盖、词数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为主题征文，介绍动物部分用一般现在时，第三人称表述，整体以第一人称为叙事主体，总词数控制在80词左右符合不少于60的要求。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇点题：直接说明自己最喜欢的动物是熊猫，接着描述它黑白相间的外形、圆脸黑眼眶的外貌特征，再介绍它以竹子为食、性格温和行动缓慢的习性。
② 阐述喜爱原因：从外形可爱、是中国文化象征两个角度说明自己喜欢熊猫的理由，同时点出当前熊猫现存数量不多的现状。
③ 发出保护呼吁：提出停止砍伐竹林的具体保护举措，号召大家一起行动保护熊猫，完成全部要点。
3. 连贯成文后检查语法错误，调整语句过渡让行文更自然流畅。
【答案】
参考例文：
My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is the panda. Pandas are black and white, with round faces and big black eyes. They look really cute. They mainly feed on bamboo and they need eat it every day. Pandas are kind and slow-moving, and people all over the world love them.
I like pandas not only for their cuteness but also because they are a symbol of China. But to my sadness, there are not so many pandas in China. We should stop cutting down bamboo forests to protect pandas. Let's work together to help them.
【知识点】
英语主题征文写作，描述类词汇运用，书面表达要点覆盖
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的提示类书面表达，给定的写作要点清晰明确，学生有充足的自主发挥空间，只要紧扣三个指定要点，保证语句通顺、无明显语法错误、词数达标就可以拿到较高分数，写作时注意要点之间的过渡自然，不要生硬拆分内容，行文流畅度会更好。
【难度系数】
0.8
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先审清全部要求：征文主题为“My Favorite Animal”，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数不少于60词，行文要流畅自然符合参赛要求。首先优先选择我们词汇储备充足、大众熟悉的动物（比如大熊猫）来写，避免因生词卡壳。接下来规划行文逻辑：第一步开篇直接点明自己最喜欢的动物，紧接着对应要点1描述它的外貌特征和生活习性，让读者对该动物形成直观印象；第二步对应要点2，从外形观感、文化属性两个角度说明喜欢它的原因，让内容更充实；第三步对应要点3，先点明这类动物当前的生存困境，再顺理成章发出保护呼吁，升华主题。最后通读全文检查语法错误，确认所有要点都覆盖、词数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为主题征文，介绍动物部分用一般现在时，第三人称表述，整体以第一人称为叙事主体，总词数控制在80词左右符合不少于60的要求。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 开篇点题：直接说明自己最喜欢的动物是熊猫，接着描述它黑白相间的外形、圆脸黑眼眶的外貌特征，再介绍它以竹子为食、性格温和行动缓慢的习性。
② 阐述喜爱原因：从外形可爱、是中国文化象征两个角度说明自己喜欢熊猫的理由，同时点出当前熊猫现存数量不多的现状。
③ 发出保护呼吁：提出停止砍伐竹林的具体保护举措，号召大家一起行动保护熊猫，完成全部要点。
3. 连贯成文后检查语法错误，调整语句过渡让行文更自然流畅。
【答案】
参考例文：
My Favorite Animal
My favorite animal is the panda. Pandas are black and white, with round faces and big black eyes. They look really cute. They mainly feed on bamboo and they need eat it every day. Pandas are kind and slow-moving, and people all over the world love them.
I like pandas not only for their cuteness but also because they are a symbol of China. But to my sadness, there are not so many pandas in China. We should stop cutting down bamboo forests to protect pandas. Let's work together to help them.
【知识点】
英语主题征文写作，描述类词汇运用，书面表达要点覆盖
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的提示类书面表达，给定的写作要点清晰明确，学生有充足的自主发挥空间，只要紧扣三个指定要点，保证语句通顺、无明显语法错误、词数达标就可以拿到较高分数，写作时注意要点之间的过渡自然，不要生硬拆分内容，行文流畅度会更好。
【难度系数】
0.8
