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五、书面表达。
"中国梦"是一个热门话题。阳光中学七(1)班举行了主题为"我的中国梦"的讨论会。请根据所给提示，以"My dream home in the dream neighbourhood"为题，谈谈自己理想社区中的梦想家园。
1. 社区情况：社区很大，邻居友善，病有人医，坏有人修，老有人问，学有人帮……；2. 周围环境：附近有一条河流，可以……；3. 房子概况：两层，一个花园……；4. 内部设施：有多个房间、一个大阳台……
要求：1. 词数70左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；2. 语句通顺，意思连贯，字迹工整；3. 内容必须包括以上要点，可以适当发挥。
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors.
"中国梦"是一个热门话题。阳光中学七(1)班举行了主题为"我的中国梦"的讨论会。请根据所给提示，以"My dream home in the dream neighbourhood"为题，谈谈自己理想社区中的梦想家园。
1. 社区情况：社区很大，邻居友善，病有人医，坏有人修，老有人问，学有人帮……；2. 周围环境：附近有一条河流，可以……；3. 房子概况：两层，一个花园……；4. 内部设施：有多个房间、一个大阳台……
要求：1. 词数70左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；2. 语句通顺，意思连贯，字迹工整；3. 内容必须包括以上要点，可以适当发挥。
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors.
Around my dream home, there is a clean river, and I can swim in it in summer. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers in it. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it too. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are friendly to each other.
There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors, and they can take good care of sick people.
If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them.
When we have any problem with our studies, the college students will help us.
They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping. It's pleasant to live in my dream home.
答案
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. Around my dream home, there is a clean river, and I can swim in it in summer. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers in it. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it too. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are friendly to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors, and they can take good care of sick people. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have any problem with our studies, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
It's pleasant to live in my dream home.
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. Around my dream home, there is a clean river, and I can swim in it in summer. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers in it. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it too. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are friendly to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors, and they can take good care of sick people. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have any problem with our studies, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
It's pleasant to live in my dream home.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题是“理想社区中的梦想家园”，必须覆盖题干给出的4类全部提示要点，使用第一人称、一般现在时进行写作，语句符合七年级英语表达水平。首先先把题干给出的要点逐一列出来避免漏写：1. 周边有河流可以开展相关活动；2. 两层的房子带花园；3. 屋内有多个房间、大阳台；4. 社区面积大、邻居友善，有能看病的医生、修东西的技工、辅导学习的志愿者、关爱老人的热心人。接着顺着题干给出的开头内容依次展开：先写家周边的河流，再介绍房子的花园、内部设施，之后介绍社区的相关情况，最后收尾抒发居住的愉悦感，适当补充少量符合逻辑的细节让内容更生动，调整语句衔接保证通顺连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：明确文体为介绍类说明文，人称用第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，必须全部覆盖题干给出的4项内容要点，词数符合要求，不能遗漏关键信息。
2. 搭建行文逻辑：
① 承接题干给出的开头两句，先介绍周边环境：说明家附近有清澈的河流，夏天可以在河里游泳；接着介绍房屋配套：房子带有种满各类鲜花的漂亮花园，屋内有多个房间和宽敞的大阳台，可以站在阳台上眺望山和树木。
② 接着介绍所在社区的情况：点明社区面积很大，邻居之间都十分友善，社区里有很多志愿者：有医生可以照料生病的居民，有工程师可以帮大家维修出故障的物品，有大学生可以辅导大家解决学习上的问题，大家还经常帮老人打扫房屋、采购物资。
③ 最后收尾点题，表达住在这样的梦想家园是非常愉快的体验。
3. 调整语句衔接，修正语法错误，保证行文流畅自然，符合七年级学生的表达习惯。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. Around my dream home, there is a clean river, and I can swim in it in summer. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers in it. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it too. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are friendly to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors, and they can take good care of sick people. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have any problem with our studies, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
It's pleasant to live in my dream home.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般现在时运用，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题是七年级配套的基础写作题，主题贴近学生生活，所有核心写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生自行构思复杂的内容，重点考察学生对地点描述类基础词汇、句型的掌握程度，以及不漏点完成写作的能力，能有效锻炼学生的基础英语书面表达逻辑。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题是“理想社区中的梦想家园”，必须覆盖题干给出的4类全部提示要点，使用第一人称、一般现在时进行写作，语句符合七年级英语表达水平。首先先把题干给出的要点逐一列出来避免漏写：1. 周边有河流可以开展相关活动；2. 两层的房子带花园；3. 屋内有多个房间、大阳台；4. 社区面积大、邻居友善，有能看病的医生、修东西的技工、辅导学习的志愿者、关爱老人的热心人。接着顺着题干给出的开头内容依次展开：先写家周边的河流，再介绍房子的花园、内部设施，之后介绍社区的相关情况，最后收尾抒发居住的愉悦感，适当补充少量符合逻辑的细节让内容更生动，调整语句衔接保证通顺连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：明确文体为介绍类说明文，人称用第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，必须全部覆盖题干给出的4项内容要点，词数符合要求，不能遗漏关键信息。
2. 搭建行文逻辑：
① 承接题干给出的开头两句，先介绍周边环境：说明家附近有清澈的河流，夏天可以在河里游泳；接着介绍房屋配套：房子带有种满各类鲜花的漂亮花园，屋内有多个房间和宽敞的大阳台，可以站在阳台上眺望山和树木。
② 接着介绍所在社区的情况：点明社区面积很大，邻居之间都十分友善，社区里有很多志愿者：有医生可以照料生病的居民，有工程师可以帮大家维修出故障的物品，有大学生可以辅导大家解决学习上的问题，大家还经常帮老人打扫房屋、采购物资。
③ 最后收尾点题，表达住在这样的梦想家园是非常愉快的体验。
3. 调整语句衔接，修正语法错误，保证行文流畅自然，符合七年级学生的表达习惯。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream home in the dream neighbourhood
My dream home is at the foot of a hill. It has two floors. Around my dream home, there is a clean river, and I can swim in it in summer. There is a beautiful garden with different kinds of flowers in it. There are many rooms and a big balcony in it too. I can look out at the hill and trees on the balcony.
My dream home is in a very big neighbourhood and the neighbours are friendly to each other. There are many volunteers in my neighbourhood. Some of them are doctors, and they can take good care of sick people. If there is something wrong with our things, the engineers here can help us fix them. When we have any problem with our studies, the college students will help us. They often help the old clean their houses and do some shopping.
It's pleasant to live in my dream home.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般现在时运用，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题是七年级配套的基础写作题，主题贴近学生生活，所有核心写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生自行构思复杂的内容，重点考察学生对地点描述类基础词汇、句型的掌握程度，以及不漏点完成写作的能力，能有效锻炼学生的基础英语书面表达逻辑。
【难度系数】
0.6
