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地球是人类赖以生存的家园,人类应该和大自然和谐相处。但近年来,随着全球气候变化的加剧,很多自然奇观日渐消失,大自然正在呼救。请以 The frozen world is disappearing 为题,用第一人称写一篇文章,描述北极目前存在的环境问题,文章内容包含以下要点。
要求:1.70词左右;2.不要出现真实姓名;3.可根据要点适当发挥。
【写作指导】
一、审题
体裁: 时态:
人称:
二、思路点拨
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. 最冷的地方之一
2. 充满
3. 污染空气
4. 燃烧气和煤
5. 砍伐森林
6. 多种树
7. 少开车
四、句型提示
1. 我是北极,地球上最冷的地方之一。
I'm North Pole, one of on .
2. 我是很多动物的家。
I'm the .
3. 人们为了汽车和工厂燃烧气和煤。
People for cars and factories.
4. 人们为了木材和耕地砍伐森林。
People for wood and farming space.
5. 动物们会死去,因为他们失去了食物和家园。
Animals because they and .
6. 让我们一起阻止美丽的冰雪天地消失。
Let's the beautiful frozen land .
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
要求:1.70词左右;2.不要出现真实姓名;3.可根据要点适当发挥。
【写作指导】
一、审题
体裁: 时态:
人称:
二、思路点拨
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. 最冷的地方之一
2. 充满
3. 污染空气
4. 燃烧气和煤
5. 砍伐森林
6. 多种树
7. 少开车
四、句型提示
1. 我是北极,地球上最冷的地方之一。
I'm North Pole, one of on .
2. 我是很多动物的家。
I'm the .
3. 人们为了汽车和工厂燃烧气和煤。
People for cars and factories.
4. 人们为了木材和耕地砍伐森林。
People for wood and farming space.
5. 动物们会死去,因为他们失去了食物和家园。
Animals because they and .
6. 让我们一起阻止美丽的冰雪天地消失。
Let's the beautiful frozen land .
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
答案
【写作指导】
一、审题
一般现在时为主,也会用到一般过去时和一般将来时;说明文;第一人称
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. one of the coldest places 2. full of
3. pollute the air 4. burn gas and coal
5. cut down forests 6. plant more trees
7. drive cars less
四、句型提示
1. the coldest places ;the earth
2. home of many animals
3. burn gas and coal
4. cut down forests
5. will die; lose their food; homes
6. stop; from disappearing
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
I am the North Pole, one of the coldest
places on the earth. It's a land full of ice and
snow, so people often call me beautiful
frozen world.
Many years ago, I was the home of
many cute animals. But now, people pollute
the air by burning gas and coal for cars and
factories. They also cut down forests for
wood and more farming space. All of these
make the earth hotter. I am disappearing. If
I turn into water world, animals will die
because they lose food and their homes. I'm
crying, so please help me by planting more
trees, driving cars less and not wasting
things.
Together, let's stop the beautiful
frozen land from disappearing.
一、审题
一般现在时为主,也会用到一般过去时和一般将来时;说明文;第一人称
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. one of the coldest places 2. full of
3. pollute the air 4. burn gas and coal
5. cut down forests 6. plant more trees
7. drive cars less
四、句型提示
1. the coldest places ;the earth
2. home of many animals
3. burn gas and coal
4. cut down forests
5. will die; lose their food; homes
6. stop; from disappearing
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
I am the North Pole, one of the coldest
places on the earth. It's a land full of ice and
snow, so people often call me beautiful
frozen world.
Many years ago, I was the home of
many cute animals. But now, people pollute
the air by burning gas and coal for cars and
factories. They also cut down forests for
wood and more farming space. All of these
make the earth hotter. I am disappearing. If
I turn into water world, animals will die
because they lose food and their homes. I'm
crying, so please help me by planting more
trees, driving cars less and not wasting
things.
Together, let's stop the beautiful
frozen land from disappearing.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思路来解题：1. 先完成审题环节，明确写作的体裁、时态、人称要求，避免出现格式和视角错误；2. 先把题目给出的词汇联想、句型提示的基础填空完成，提前把核心表达储备好，不用额外想复杂的生词；3. 搭建文章逻辑框架：先用第一人称北极的视角做自我介绍，接着描述过去北极的美好状态，再点明当下人类的破坏行为带来的冰川消融、动物生存危机，最后发出简单的环保呼吁，调整语句让内容通顺，符合70词左右的字数要求，全程不要出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
我们按照题目给出的模块逐步完成作答：
1. 审题部分：体裁是介绍北极环境现状的说明文，时态以一般现在时为主，描述过去北极的状态可用一般过去时，描述不保护环境的后果可用一般将来时，人称要求为第一人称。
2. 写作要点及词汇联想部分：结合所学的核心短语直接对应填写即可，所有短语都是初中阶段要求掌握的环保类固定表达。
3. 句型提示部分：结合已给的中文句意和固定搭配补全句子，重点考察one of+形容词最高级结构、stop...from...等核心语法点。
4. 写作练习部分：把上述储备的表达按逻辑串联，调整语句流畅度，就可以得到符合要求的完整文章。
【答案】
【写作指导】
一、审题
说明文；一般现在时为主，也会用到一般过去时和一般将来时；第一人称
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. one of the coldest places 2. full of
3. pollute the air 4. burn gas and coal
5. cut down forests 6. plant more trees
7. drive cars less
四、句型提示
1. the coldest places ;the earth
2. home of many animals
3. burn gas and coal
4. cut down forests
5. will die; lose their food; homes
6. stop; from disappearing
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
I am the North Pole, one of the coldest places on the earth. It's a land full of ice and snow, so people often call me beautiful frozen world.
Many years ago, I was the home of many cute animals. But now, people pollute the air by burning gas and coal for cars and factories. They also cut down forests for wood and more farming space. All of these make the earth hotter. I am disappearing. If I turn into water world, animals will die because they lose food and their homes. I'm crying, so please help me by planting more trees, driving cars less and not wasting things.
Together, let's stop the beautiful frozen land from disappearing.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作，形容词最高级，固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题是给出充足提示的环保主题基础写作，已经提前给出了核心词汇和参考句型，大幅降低了写作门槛，学生只需要按照第一人称的北极视角，按“自我介绍-现状危机-环保呼吁”的逻辑串联内容，注意不同时态的切换符合语境，就可以写出符合要求的文章，同时也能建立正确的环保意识。
【难度系数】
0.5
拿到这道写作题，我们可以按三步思路来解题：1. 先完成审题环节，明确写作的体裁、时态、人称要求，避免出现格式和视角错误；2. 先把题目给出的词汇联想、句型提示的基础填空完成，提前把核心表达储备好，不用额外想复杂的生词；3. 搭建文章逻辑框架：先用第一人称北极的视角做自我介绍，接着描述过去北极的美好状态，再点明当下人类的破坏行为带来的冰川消融、动物生存危机，最后发出简单的环保呼吁，调整语句让内容通顺，符合70词左右的字数要求，全程不要出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
我们按照题目给出的模块逐步完成作答：
1. 审题部分：体裁是介绍北极环境现状的说明文，时态以一般现在时为主，描述过去北极的状态可用一般过去时，描述不保护环境的后果可用一般将来时，人称要求为第一人称。
2. 写作要点及词汇联想部分：结合所学的核心短语直接对应填写即可，所有短语都是初中阶段要求掌握的环保类固定表达。
3. 句型提示部分：结合已给的中文句意和固定搭配补全句子，重点考察one of+形容词最高级结构、stop...from...等核心语法点。
4. 写作练习部分：把上述储备的表达按逻辑串联，调整语句流畅度，就可以得到符合要求的完整文章。
【答案】
【写作指导】
一、审题
说明文；一般现在时为主，也会用到一般过去时和一般将来时；第一人称
三、写作要点及词汇联想
1. one of the coldest places 2. full of
3. pollute the air 4. burn gas and coal
5. cut down forests 6. plant more trees
7. drive cars less
四、句型提示
1. the coldest places ;the earth
2. home of many animals
3. burn gas and coal
4. cut down forests
5. will die; lose their food; homes
6. stop; from disappearing
【写作练习】
The frozen world is disappearing
I am the North Pole, one of the coldest places on the earth. It's a land full of ice and snow, so people often call me beautiful frozen world.
Many years ago, I was the home of many cute animals. But now, people pollute the air by burning gas and coal for cars and factories. They also cut down forests for wood and more farming space. All of these make the earth hotter. I am disappearing. If I turn into water world, animals will die because they lose food and their homes. I'm crying, so please help me by planting more trees, driving cars less and not wasting things.
Together, let's stop the beautiful frozen land from disappearing.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作，形容词最高级，固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题是给出充足提示的环保主题基础写作，已经提前给出了核心词汇和参考句型，大幅降低了写作门槛，学生只需要按照第一人称的北极视角，按“自我介绍-现状危机-环保呼吁”的逻辑串联内容，注意不同时态的切换符合语境，就可以写出符合要求的文章，同时也能建立正确的环保意识。
【难度系数】
0.5
