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假如你是来自合肥某中学的王涛，你的美国笔友 Jack 最近写信向你询问这几年你本人、你的生活和你的家乡的变化，请根据下面的思维导图提示给他回信，介绍一下这些变化并描述你的感受。
审题指导：
1. 体裁：记叙文 2. 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主 3. 人称：以第一人称为主
写作框架：
优秀范文：
Dear Jack,
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be⁽¹⁾ short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students.⁽⁵⁾ But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online⁽²⁾.
In recent years, great changes have taken place⁽³⁾ in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with⁽⁴⁾ these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.⁽⁶⁾
Yours,
Wang Tao
亮点词块
① used to be 过去是
② shop online 网购
③ take place 发生
④ be happy with 对……感到开心
高分句子
⑤ ... it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. (it 作形式主语)……对我来说和外国学生交流很困难。
⑥ I hope you can come to my hometown one day.（含宾语从句的主从复合句）我希望有一天你能来我的家乡。
假如你是来自合肥某中学的王涛，你的美国笔友 Jack 最近写信向你询问这几年你本人、你的生活和你的家乡的变化，请根据下面的思维导图提示给他回信，介绍一下这些变化并描述你的感受。
审题指导：
1. 体裁：记叙文 2. 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主 3. 人称：以第一人称为主
写作框架：
优秀范文：
Dear Jack,
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be⁽¹⁾ short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students.⁽⁵⁾ But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online⁽²⁾.
In recent years, great changes have taken place⁽³⁾ in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with⁽⁴⁾ these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.⁽⁶⁾
Yours,
Wang Tao
亮点词块
① used to be 过去是
② shop online 网购
③ take place 发生
④ be happy with 对……感到开心
高分句子
⑤ ... it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. (it 作形式主语)……对我来说和外国学生交流很困难。
⑥ I hope you can come to my hometown one day.（含宾语从句的主从复合句）我希望有一天你能来我的家乡。
答案
Dear Jack,
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online.
In recent years, great changes have taken place in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.
Yours,
Wang Tao
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online.
In recent years, great changes have taken place in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.
Yours,
Wang Tao
解析
【分析】本题为英语书信写作题，解题思路如下：1. 审题：明确体裁为书信，时态以一般过去时（描述过去状态）和一般现在时（描述现在变化）为主，人称用第一人称；2. 确定写作内容：围绕自身变化（外貌、性格、学习）、生活变化（交流、购物方式）、家乡变化（环境、交通）三方面展开；3. 组织语言：使用对比句式（used to...but now...）体现变化，运用亮点词块和高分句式提升文章质量，结尾表达感受并发出邀请。
【解析】按照书信格式写作：①开头问候并点明写信目的是介绍自身、生活及家乡的变化；②主体部分：用used to对比过去与现在的自身变化（外貌、性格、英语学习）、生活变化（交流、购物方式）；接着介绍家乡的变化（环境、交通）；③结尾表达对变化的开心，邀请Jack来家乡。
【答案】Dear Jack,
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online.
In recent years, great changes have taken place in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.
Yours,
Wang Tao
【知识点】英语书信写作、时态运用、常用英语短语
【点评】本文严格遵循书信格式，紧扣题目要求介绍自身、生活及家乡的变化，时态运用准确，对比句式清晰，亮点词块和高分句式的使用让文章更出彩，情感真挚，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】按照书信格式写作：①开头问候并点明写信目的是介绍自身、生活及家乡的变化；②主体部分：用used to对比过去与现在的自身变化（外貌、性格、英语学习）、生活变化（交流、购物方式）；接着介绍家乡的变化（环境、交通）；③结尾表达对变化的开心，邀请Jack来家乡。
【答案】Dear Jack,
How are you? I’m glad to tell you something about the changes in me, my life and my hometown.
I used to be short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong. I was shy before, but now I’m more outgoing and have many friends. As for study, English was difficult for me and it was hard for me to talk with foreign students. But now I can speak English better. I used to chat with my friends face to face, but now we mostly chat on the Internet. I used to go shopping in small shops, but now I often shop online.
In recent years, great changes have taken place in my hometown, too. The environment is better and better. There are more trees and flowers. Transportation has become more convenient. There are more buses and subways. People are happier.
I’m very happy with these changes. I hope you can come to my hometown one day.
Yours,
Wang Tao
【知识点】英语书信写作、时态运用、常用英语短语
【点评】本文严格遵循书信格式，紧扣题目要求介绍自身、生活及家乡的变化，时态运用准确，对比句式清晰，亮点词块和高分句式的使用让文章更出彩，情感真挚，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.5
