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第三节 书面表达(共15分)
你校校报拟举办以 "The person I will never forget" 为题的英语征文活动。
请你根据下列思维导图提供的信息,写一篇记叙文,介绍一位令你难忘的人。
你校校报拟举办以 "The person I will never forget" 为题的英语征文活动。
请你根据下列思维导图提供的信息,写一篇记叙文,介绍一位令你难忘的人。
The Person I Will Never Forget
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who
always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her
youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night
in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and
wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas
continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the
person I will never forget.
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who
always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her
youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night
in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and
wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas
continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the
person I will never forget.
答案
The Person I Will Never Forget
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who
always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her
youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night
in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and
wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas
continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the
person I will never forget.
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who
always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her
youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night
in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and
wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas
continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the
person I will never forget.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题，先梳理题干给出的思维导图要求，明确写作需要覆盖的全部要点：第一部分要介绍你要写的人物的三个核心信息——和你的关系、人物的职业、人物的性格特质；第二部分要讲清楚你为什么永远不会忘记这个人，要搭配具体的事件和人物对你的实际影响，让内容有真情实感。解题时第一步先选定你熟悉的写作对象，比如家人、老师都可以，第二步搭建文章结构：开篇直接点题，点明你难忘的人是谁；中间部分先依次把人物的关系、职业、性格三个信息自然融入叙事，再讲具体的相处事件，说明对方带给你的触动和影响；结尾再次呼应主题，强化“永远难忘”的核心，同时注意描述过去发生的事件用一般过去时，表达当下的感受用一般现在时，保证时态准确。
【解析】
写作按照三步规范完成：
1. 开篇点题：直接紧扣作文标题，开门见山点明自己永远难忘的人是祖母，同时初步交代她善良睿智的性格特点，引出后续叙事。
2. 主体部分分层展开：
第一层对应思维导图的"Who is he/she"模块：依次交代人物信息：①和我的关系：是我的祖母；②职业：曾经是一名教师；③性格：耐心、睿智、热爱书籍，补充细节：她过去常常给我讲故事、睡前给我读书，把三个要求的要点全部自然融入内容，不生硬堆砌。
第二层对应思维导图的"Why won't you forget him/her"模块：说明祖母的品质深刻影响了我的成长，哪怕她已经不在我身边，她传递的理念也一直指引我前行，把难忘的原因讲得具体有说服力。
3. 结尾收束：再次呼应主题，点明自己会永远记得祖母的善意和对我的爱，完成全文闭环，结构完整。
【答案】
The Person I Will Never Forget
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the person I will never forget.
【知识点】
英语人物记叙文写作，一般过去时运用，写作要点整合
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干思维导图给出的所有写作要求，结构清晰完整，叙事细节饱满有真情实感，时态运用准确自然，没有语法错误，既清晰塑造了祖母的人物形象，也把“难忘”的核心原因交代得十分动人，符合校报征文的风格。同学们写同类人物主题作文时，可以先把题干要求的所有要点提前列在草稿纸上，避免漏点丢分，再补充贴合生活的小细节，就能让作文更出彩。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道写作题，先梳理题干给出的思维导图要求，明确写作需要覆盖的全部要点：第一部分要介绍你要写的人物的三个核心信息——和你的关系、人物的职业、人物的性格特质；第二部分要讲清楚你为什么永远不会忘记这个人，要搭配具体的事件和人物对你的实际影响，让内容有真情实感。解题时第一步先选定你熟悉的写作对象，比如家人、老师都可以，第二步搭建文章结构：开篇直接点题，点明你难忘的人是谁；中间部分先依次把人物的关系、职业、性格三个信息自然融入叙事，再讲具体的相处事件，说明对方带给你的触动和影响；结尾再次呼应主题，强化“永远难忘”的核心，同时注意描述过去发生的事件用一般过去时，表达当下的感受用一般现在时，保证时态准确。
【解析】
写作按照三步规范完成：
1. 开篇点题：直接紧扣作文标题，开门见山点明自己永远难忘的人是祖母，同时初步交代她善良睿智的性格特点，引出后续叙事。
2. 主体部分分层展开：
第一层对应思维导图的"Who is he/she"模块：依次交代人物信息：①和我的关系：是我的祖母；②职业：曾经是一名教师；③性格：耐心、睿智、热爱书籍，补充细节：她过去常常给我讲故事、睡前给我读书，把三个要求的要点全部自然融入内容，不生硬堆砌。
第二层对应思维导图的"Why won't you forget him/her"模块：说明祖母的品质深刻影响了我的成长，哪怕她已经不在我身边，她传递的理念也一直指引我前行，把难忘的原因讲得具体有说服力。
3. 结尾收束：再次呼应主题，点明自己会永远记得祖母的善意和对我的爱，完成全文闭环，结构完整。
【答案】
The Person I Will Never Forget
The person I will never forget is my grandmother. She was a kind and wise woman who always had a story to tell. Every summer, I would visit her and she would share stories from her youth, teaching me valuable life lessons along the way.
My grandmother used to be a teacher and she loved books. She would read to me every night in front of my bed, and those moments are some of my fondest memories. Her patience and wisdom have greatly influenced who I am today. Even though she is no longer with us, her ideas continue to guide me.
I will always remember my grandmother's kindness and her love for me. She truly is the person I will never forget.
【知识点】
英语人物记叙文写作，一般过去时运用，写作要点整合
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干思维导图给出的所有写作要求，结构清晰完整，叙事细节饱满有真情实感，时态运用准确自然，没有语法错误，既清晰塑造了祖母的人物形象，也把“难忘”的核心原因交代得十分动人，符合校报征文的风格。同学们写同类人物主题作文时，可以先把题干要求的所有要点提前列在草稿纸上，避免漏点丢分，再补充贴合生活的小细节，就能让作文更出彩。
【难度系数】
0.6
