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上周，一场突如其来的暴风雪袭击了淮安。请以"A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an"为题写一篇80词左右的短文介绍这次暴风雪的过程。内容包括以下要点：
1. 这场暴风雪是何时降临的；
2. 暴风雪来临时你以及周边人的情况；
3. 暴风雪结束后你们进行了哪些自救工作。
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
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A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
A snowstorm hit Huai'an on Wednesday. It got even worse in the afternoon. I was at school and Mr Wang told us to go home early. On my way home, the weather was really terrible. We could only hear the wind. Snow continued to fall around us. Suddenly, a strong wind came from behind. We lost our umbrellas in the wind and I nearly fell over. We could do nothing but walk slowly in the storm. At last, we got on a bus and went home. The next day, I heard the noise of traffic. I looked out of the window and saw that people were in a hurry to remove the snow.
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，运用所学词汇和句式，对自己遭遇灾害性天气的过程进行了生动的描述，体现了作者能够根据具体情况组织文字、处理信息以及整合篇章的能力。作者用词准确，文笔流畅，有较好的语言学习基础和运用表达能力。
·亮点词汇：get even worse；really terrible；lose one's umbrella；fall over等。
·高分句式：We could do nothing but walk slowly in the storm.（nothing but表示窘况下的无奈之举）
I looked out of the window and saw that people were in a hurry to remove the snow.（that引导宾语从句）
上周，一场突如其来的暴风雪袭击了淮安。请以"A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an"为题写一篇80词左右的短文介绍这次暴风雪的过程。内容包括以下要点：
1. 这场暴风雪是何时降临的；
2. 暴风雪来临时你以及周边人的情况；
3. 暴风雪结束后你们进行了哪些自救工作。
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
范文欣赏
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
A snowstorm hit Huai'an on Wednesday. It got even worse in the afternoon. I was at school and Mr Wang told us to go home early. On my way home, the weather was really terrible. We could only hear the wind. Snow continued to fall around us. Suddenly, a strong wind came from behind. We lost our umbrellas in the wind and I nearly fell over. We could do nothing but walk slowly in the storm. At last, we got on a bus and went home. The next day, I heard the noise of traffic. I looked out of the window and saw that people were in a hurry to remove the snow.
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，运用所学词汇和句式，对自己遭遇灾害性天气的过程进行了生动的描述，体现了作者能够根据具体情况组织文字、处理信息以及整合篇章的能力。作者用词准确，文笔流畅，有较好的语言学习基础和运用表达能力。
·亮点词汇：get even worse；really terrible；lose one's umbrella；fall over等。
·高分句式：We could do nothing but walk slowly in the storm.（nothing but表示窘况下的无奈之举）
I looked out of the window and saw that people were in a hurry to remove the snow.（that引导宾语从句）
答案
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
A snowstorm hit Huai'an last Wednesday afternoon. I was on my way home from school then. The wind blew hard and snow flew everywhere. I could hardly see the road. Some people lost their umbrellas and others walked slowly against the wind. When the storm stopped the next day, my family and neighbors worked together to clear the snow from the roads and sidewalks. We also helped an old couple clean the snow in their yard.
A snowstorm hit Huai'an last Wednesday afternoon. I was on my way home from school then. The wind blew hard and snow flew everywhere. I could hardly see the road. Some people lost their umbrellas and others walked slowly against the wind. When the storm stopped the next day, my family and neighbors worked together to clear the snow from the roads and sidewalks. We also helped an old couple clean the snow in their yard.
解析
【分析】
本题要求以“A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an”为题写80词左右的短文，需涵盖三个核心要点：1.暴风雪降临的时间；2.暴风雪来临时自身及周边人的情况；3.暴风雪结束后的自救工作。解题思路：先明确时间节点，再围绕要点依次描述场景，选用贴合话题的词汇与简单句式，控制词数，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【解析】
根据题目要求，紧扣三个要点组织内容：1.点明暴风雪时间为上周三下午；2.描述“我”放学路上的恶劣天气（大风、大雪）及路人的反应；3.说明风暴停止后，家人、邻居共同清雪，还帮助老人清理庭院积雪。用词选用贴合场景的表达，语句通顺，符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
A snowstorm hit Huai'an last Wednesday afternoon. I was on my way home from school then. The wind blew hard and snow flew everywhere. I could hardly see the road. Some people lost their umbrellas and others walked slowly against the wind. When the storm stopped the next day, my family and neighbors worked together to clear the snow from the roads and sidewalks. We also helped an old couple clean the snow in their yard.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；话题类短文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求的所有要点，内容完整，语言简洁准确，句式自然流畅，符合初中英语写作的规范，清晰呈现了暴风雪的过程及后续自救行动，体现了较好的语言组织与表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以“A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an”为题写80词左右的短文，需涵盖三个核心要点：1.暴风雪降临的时间；2.暴风雪来临时自身及周边人的情况；3.暴风雪结束后的自救工作。解题思路：先明确时间节点，再围绕要点依次描述场景，选用贴合话题的词汇与简单句式，控制词数，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【解析】
根据题目要求，紧扣三个要点组织内容：1.点明暴风雪时间为上周三下午；2.描述“我”放学路上的恶劣天气（大风、大雪）及路人的反应；3.说明风暴停止后，家人、邻居共同清雪，还帮助老人清理庭院积雪。用词选用贴合场景的表达，语句通顺，符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
A Snowstorm Hit Huai'an
A snowstorm hit Huai'an last Wednesday afternoon. I was on my way home from school then. The wind blew hard and snow flew everywhere. I could hardly see the road. Some people lost their umbrellas and others walked slowly against the wind. When the storm stopped the next day, my family and neighbors worked together to clear the snow from the roads and sidewalks. We also helped an old couple clean the snow in their yard.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；话题类短文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求的所有要点，内容完整，语言简洁准确，句式自然流畅，符合初中英语写作的规范，清晰呈现了暴风雪的过程及后续自救行动，体现了较好的语言组织与表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
