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二、实战演练
假设你是李华,你校英语校报将组织主题为"共建绿色校园"的征文活动,你打算写一份倡议书投稿,内容如下:
注意:
1.倡议书中须包含所有要点提示,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.倡议书中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是李华,你校英语校报将组织主题为"共建绿色校园"的征文活动,你打算写一份倡议书投稿,内容如下:
注意:
1.倡议书中须包含所有要点提示,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.倡议书中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
第5课时 单元写作指导
二、实战演练
One possible version:
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There
are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
In order to make our school green, first, we should
turn off the lights when leaving classrooms to save
electricity. Secondly, turn off the taps after using water to
avoid waste. Thirdly, we can plant more trees and flowers
around our school to make it more beautiful. On the other
hand, don't litter anywhere. Avoid using single-use plastic
products like plastic bags. And never step on the grass or
pick flowers.
It's important for us to have a green school. I
believe our school will be more beautiful. Let's take
action now and make our school green!
Yours,
Li Hua
二、实战演练
One possible version:
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There
are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
In order to make our school green, first, we should
turn off the lights when leaving classrooms to save
electricity. Secondly, turn off the taps after using water to
avoid waste. Thirdly, we can plant more trees and flowers
around our school to make it more beautiful. On the other
hand, don't litter anywhere. Avoid using single-use plastic
products like plastic bags. And never step on the grass or
pick flowers.
It's important for us to have a green school. I
believe our school will be more beautiful. Let's take
action now and make our school green!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道倡议书写作题，首先明确核心主题是“共建绿色校园”，需要按照思维导图的Dos和Don'ts两个板块梳理内容：首先要覆盖思维导图里已有的两个要点“随手关水龙头”、“不要乱扔垃圾”，再分别给两个板块补充2-3个符合校园环保场景的合理行为，比如应该做的还可以有离开教室随手关灯、多种植花草树木，不应该做的还可以有不使用一次性塑料制品、不践踏草坪摘花。接下来用合适的逻辑连接词把内容串联起来，先讲倡议大家要践行的环保行为，再讲要杜绝的不文明行为，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾发出号召，同时控制总词数在要求范围内，不要出现真实个人和学校信息即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，用逻辑词firstly、secondly、thirdly依次罗列应当践行的环保行为，将题干提示的“turn off the taps”自然融入其中，补充节约用电、种植绿植的细节，让内容更充实。
2. 用过渡短语On the other hand转到禁止行为的板块，依次罗列不能做的事，覆盖提示的“don't litter”要点，补充不使用一次性塑料、不践踏草坪摘花的合理内容，符合校园场景。
3. 最后衔接题干给出的结尾部分，发出行动号召，整体行文流畅，逻辑清晰，词数符合80~100的要求，满足所有写作规则。
【答案】
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
In order to make our school green, first, we should turn off the lights when leaving classrooms to save electricity. Secondly, turn off the taps after using water to avoid waste. Thirdly, we can plant more trees and flowers around our school to make it more beautiful. On the other hand, don't litter anywhere. Avoid using single-use plastic products like plastic bags. And never step on the grass or pick flowers.
It's important for us to have a green school. I believe our school will be more beautiful. Let's take action now and make our school green!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语倡议书写作，环保主题表达，逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本题是校园环保主题的应用类写作，既考查学生的英语语句组织和信息整合能力，也渗透了绿色环保的德育导向。写作时要注意不要遗漏思维导图给出的既定要点，补充的内容要贴合校园场景，保证行文条理清晰，符合倡议书的号召性语气。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道倡议书写作题，首先明确核心主题是“共建绿色校园”，需要按照思维导图的Dos和Don'ts两个板块梳理内容：首先要覆盖思维导图里已有的两个要点“随手关水龙头”、“不要乱扔垃圾”，再分别给两个板块补充2-3个符合校园环保场景的合理行为，比如应该做的还可以有离开教室随手关灯、多种植花草树木，不应该做的还可以有不使用一次性塑料制品、不践踏草坪摘花。接下来用合适的逻辑连接词把内容串联起来，先讲倡议大家要践行的环保行为，再讲要杜绝的不文明行为，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾发出号召，同时控制总词数在要求范围内，不要出现真实个人和学校信息即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，用逻辑词firstly、secondly、thirdly依次罗列应当践行的环保行为，将题干提示的“turn off the taps”自然融入其中，补充节约用电、种植绿植的细节，让内容更充实。
2. 用过渡短语On the other hand转到禁止行为的板块，依次罗列不能做的事，覆盖提示的“don't litter”要点，补充不使用一次性塑料、不践踏草坪摘花的合理内容，符合校园场景。
3. 最后衔接题干给出的结尾部分，发出行动号召，整体行文流畅，逻辑清晰，词数符合80~100的要求，满足所有写作规则。
【答案】
Dear schoolmates,
It is important for us to build a green school. There are things we should do and things we shouldn't do.
In order to make our school green, first, we should turn off the lights when leaving classrooms to save electricity. Secondly, turn off the taps after using water to avoid waste. Thirdly, we can plant more trees and flowers around our school to make it more beautiful. On the other hand, don't litter anywhere. Avoid using single-use plastic products like plastic bags. And never step on the grass or pick flowers.
It's important for us to have a green school. I believe our school will be more beautiful. Let's take action now and make our school green!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语倡议书写作，环保主题表达，逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本题是校园环保主题的应用类写作，既考查学生的英语语句组织和信息整合能力，也渗透了绿色环保的德育导向。写作时要注意不要遗漏思维导图给出的既定要点，补充的内容要贴合校园场景，保证行文条理清晰，符合倡议书的号召性语气。
【难度系数】
0.6
