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孟子说:“不以规矩,不能成方圆。”假如你是李华,你在家和学校需要遵守一些规则。你的笔友Susan想了解这些规则。请根据提示,给她写一封邮件,词数80—100。
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
审题指导:
1.体裁:应用文 2.时态:一般现在时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架:
优秀范文:
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. ④ I must help with① dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework② first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower. ⑤
Our school has school rules. We must arrive
:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully③ in class. We can’t run or shout in the hallways.
I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them. ⑥
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
亮点词块
①help with 帮助
②finish my homework 完成我的作业
③listen to the teachers carefully 认真听老师讲
高分句子
④There are many rules at my home.(there be 句型)我家有很多规则。
⑤Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.(before 引导的时间状语从句)睡觉前,我必须冲澡。
⑥I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.(含有宾语从句的复合句)我认为这些规则对我们来说非常重要,我们应该遵守它们。
孟子说:“不以规矩,不能成方圆。”假如你是李华,你在家和学校需要遵守一些规则。你的笔友Susan想了解这些规则。请根据提示,给她写一封邮件,词数80—100。
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
审题指导:
1.体裁:应用文 2.时态:一般现在时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架:
优秀范文:
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. ④ I must help with① dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework② first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower. ⑤
Our school has school rules. We must arrive
:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully③ in class. We can’t run or shout in the hallways.I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them. ⑥
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
亮点词块
①help with 帮助
②finish my homework 完成我的作业
③listen to the teachers carefully 认真听老师讲
高分句子
④There are many rules at my home.(there be 句型)我家有很多规则。
⑤Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.(before 引导的时间状语从句)睡觉前,我必须冲澡。
⑥I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.(含有宾语从句的复合句)我认为这些规则对我们来说非常重要,我们应该遵守它们。
答案
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. I must help with dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.
Our school has school rules. We must arrive by 7:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully in class. We can't run or shout in the hallways.
I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. I must help with dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.
Our school has school rules. We must arrive by 7:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully in class. We can't run or shout in the hallways.
I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
首先明确题目要求：需以李华的身份给笔友Susan写一封80-100词的邮件，介绍自己家与学校的规则，体裁为应用文（邮件），时态用一般现在时，人称第一人称。解题思路：1. 开头点明邮件主题，告知Susan将分享自己的家规和校规；2. 分两部分阐述规则：先写家里的规则（如饭后帮忙洗碗、每周限用手机1小时、先完成作业再做其他、睡前洗澡等），再写学校的规则（如按时到校、课堂认真听讲、走廊禁止奔跑喧哗等）；3. 结尾表达对规则的看法（规则重要应遵守），并询问Susan的规则；4. 运用亮点词块和高分句式，控制词数，符合邮件格式规范。
【解析】
1. 遵循邮件格式：开头用Dear Susan，结尾用Yours, Li Hua；
2. 时态统一：全程使用一般现在时，符合题目要求；
3. 内容结构：首段点明主题；第二段写家规，用there be句型引出，结合help with dishes、finish my homework等亮点词块，加入before引导的时间状语从句丰富内容；第三段写校规，用must、can't等情态动词表达规则，搭配listen to the teachers carefully等短语；第四段用含有宾语从句的复合句表达对规则的看法；最后询问对方的规则，确保词数在80-100之间，语言流畅自然。
【答案】
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. I must help with dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.
Our school has school rules. We must arrive by 7:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully in class. We can't run or shout in the hallways.
I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、一般现在时运用、英语邮件格式
【点评】
该范文严格契合题目要求，体裁为邮件，时态人称准确，内容覆盖家与学校的规则，运用了there be句型、时间状语从句、宾语从句等高分句式，语言简洁流畅，符合笔友交流的语气，词数达标，是一篇优秀的习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确题目要求：需以李华的身份给笔友Susan写一封80-100词的邮件，介绍自己家与学校的规则，体裁为应用文（邮件），时态用一般现在时，人称第一人称。解题思路：1. 开头点明邮件主题，告知Susan将分享自己的家规和校规；2. 分两部分阐述规则：先写家里的规则（如饭后帮忙洗碗、每周限用手机1小时、先完成作业再做其他、睡前洗澡等），再写学校的规则（如按时到校、课堂认真听讲、走廊禁止奔跑喧哗等）；3. 结尾表达对规则的看法（规则重要应遵守），并询问Susan的规则；4. 运用亮点词块和高分句式，控制词数，符合邮件格式规范。
【解析】
1. 遵循邮件格式：开头用Dear Susan，结尾用Yours, Li Hua；
2. 时态统一：全程使用一般现在时，符合题目要求；
3. 内容结构：首段点明主题；第二段写家规，用there be句型引出，结合help with dishes、finish my homework等亮点词块，加入before引导的时间状语从句丰富内容；第三段写校规，用must、can't等情态动词表达规则，搭配listen to the teachers carefully等短语；第四段用含有宾语从句的复合句表达对规则的看法；最后询问对方的规则，确保词数在80-100之间，语言流畅自然。
【答案】
Dear Susan,
I want to tell you about the rules I have to follow at home and school.
There are many rules at my home. I must help with dishes after dinner every day. I can use a smart phone for an hour every week. I have to finish my homework first after school. Before I go to bed, I have to take a shower.
Our school has school rules. We must arrive by 7:50 in the morning and listen to the teachers carefully in class. We can't run or shout in the hallways.
I think the rules are very important for us and we should follow them.
What about you? What rules do you have to follow?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、一般现在时运用、英语邮件格式
【点评】
该范文严格契合题目要求，体裁为邮件，时态人称准确，内容覆盖家与学校的规则，运用了there be句型、时间状语从句、宾语从句等高分句式，语言简洁流畅，符合笔友交流的语气，词数达标，是一篇优秀的习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
