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二、实战演练
如今旅游深受欢迎,但在旅游中我们会看到一些不文明的行为。
假设你是李华,请结合表格信息,以"Travelling in Good Manners"为题,写一篇短文向某英文报刊投稿,倡导文明旅游。
注意:
1.短文中须包含表格中的关键词,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头已给出,不计入总词数
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays,travelling is getting more and more popular.
如今旅游深受欢迎,但在旅游中我们会看到一些不文明的行为。
假设你是李华,请结合表格信息,以"Travelling in Good Manners"为题,写一篇短文向某英文报刊投稿,倡导文明旅游。
注意:
1.短文中须包含表格中的关键词,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头已给出,不计入总词数
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays,travelling is getting more and more popular.
But we can see some uncivilized behaviour during travelling. Firstly, some people throw rubbish everywhere when travelling to places of interest. It's really impolite and also causes much inconvenience for other people. They should put rubbish into dustbins to protect the environment. Secondly, some people like picking flowers in the park just because they are beautiful. This is uncivilized and selfish. We can put up signs to remind people not to do that. Thirdly, there are some people speaking loudly in public places. We should also remind them to lower their voice. In my opinion, we should travel in good manners so that everyone can enjoy the beauty of the world.
答案
二、实战演练
One possible version:
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays, travelling is getting more and more
popular. But we can see some uncivilized behaviour
during travelling. Firstly, some people throw
rubbish everywhere when travelling to places of
interest. It's really impolite and also causes much
inconvenience for other people. They should put
rubbish into dustbins to protect the environment.
Secondly, some people like picking flowers in the
park just because they are beautiful. This is
uncivilized and selfish. We can put up signs to
remind people not to do that. Thirdly, there are
some people speaking loudly in public places. We
should also remind them to lower their voice.
In my opinion, we should travel in good
manners so that everyone can enjoy the beauty of the
world.
One possible version:
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays, travelling is getting more and more
popular. But we can see some uncivilized behaviour
during travelling. Firstly, some people throw
rubbish everywhere when travelling to places of
interest. It's really impolite and also causes much
inconvenience for other people. They should put
rubbish into dustbins to protect the environment.
Secondly, some people like picking flowers in the
park just because they are beautiful. This is
uncivilized and selfish. We can put up signs to
remind people not to do that. Thirdly, there are
some people speaking loudly in public places. We
should also remind them to lower their voice.
In my opinion, we should travel in good
manners so that everyone can enjoy the beauty of the
world.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确写作任务：这是一篇向英文报刊投稿的倡议类短文，核心主题是倡导文明旅游。首先梳理题干所有要求：一是必须覆盖表格里的三个核心不文明行为：随处扔垃圾、公园摘花、公共场所大声喧哗，每个行为都要配套对应的观点评价和改进建议；二是词数控制在80~100，不能出现真实姓名和学校；三是给定开头不需要自行创作。接下来的思考路径：先承接开头引出“旅游中存在不文明行为”的总起句，之后用逻辑连接词分点依次介绍三个不文明现象，每个现象先点明行为，再给出对应的负面评价，最后给出合理建议，最后收尾发出文明出游的呼吁，保证逻辑通顺，要点无遗漏。
【解析】
写作可按三步完成：
1. 承接给定开头，自然引出核心话题：点明当下旅游过程中存在不少不文明行为，总领全文。
2. 分点展开对应表格内容：
① 首先介绍随处扔垃圾的行为：点明部分游客在景点随手扔垃圾，评价该行为既不礼貌也会给其他游客带来不便，给出建议：大家要把垃圾扔进垃圾桶，共同保护环境。
② 其次介绍公园摘花的行为：点明部分游客因为花好看就随手采摘，评价该行为自私且不文明，给出建议：园区可以设置提示牌提醒游客不要摘花。
③ 最后介绍公共场所大声喧哗的行为：点明部分游客在公共场合高声交谈，会打扰到周边的人，给出建议：大家在公共场合要主动放低音量。
3. 结尾总结升华：发出文明出游的倡议，点明只有人人都守礼仪，所有人才能共同享受旅途的美好。
写作过程中可使用firstly、secondly、thirdly这类衔接词让文章逻辑更清晰，控制总词数符合要求，不要添加无关的个人真实信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays, travelling is getting more and more popular. But we can see some uncivilized behaviour during travelling. Firstly, some people throw rubbish everywhere when travelling to places of interest. It's really impolite and also causes much inconvenience for other people. They should put rubbish into dustbins to protect the environment. Secondly, some people like picking flowers in the park just because they are beautiful. This is uncivilized and selfish. We can put up signs to remind people not to do that. Thirdly, there are some people speaking loudly in public places. We should also remind them to lower their voice.
In my opinion, we should travel in good manners so that everyone can enjoy the beauty of the world.
【知识点】
英语倡议类写作
文明旅游主题表达
逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干表格给出的所有核心要点，每一个不文明行为都配套了对应的观点评价和合理可行的建议，使用分层连接词让行文逻辑清晰，结构首尾呼应，完全符合英文报刊投稿的语境要求，词数也符合题干规定，没有出现任何违规的个人信息，是一篇非常规范的优秀参考范文。同学们写作时要注意优先保证所有要点不遗漏，再适当补充细节让内容更饱满。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要明确写作任务：这是一篇向英文报刊投稿的倡议类短文，核心主题是倡导文明旅游。首先梳理题干所有要求：一是必须覆盖表格里的三个核心不文明行为：随处扔垃圾、公园摘花、公共场所大声喧哗，每个行为都要配套对应的观点评价和改进建议；二是词数控制在80~100，不能出现真实姓名和学校；三是给定开头不需要自行创作。接下来的思考路径：先承接开头引出“旅游中存在不文明行为”的总起句，之后用逻辑连接词分点依次介绍三个不文明现象，每个现象先点明行为，再给出对应的负面评价，最后给出合理建议，最后收尾发出文明出游的呼吁，保证逻辑通顺，要点无遗漏。
【解析】
写作可按三步完成：
1. 承接给定开头，自然引出核心话题：点明当下旅游过程中存在不少不文明行为，总领全文。
2. 分点展开对应表格内容：
① 首先介绍随处扔垃圾的行为：点明部分游客在景点随手扔垃圾，评价该行为既不礼貌也会给其他游客带来不便，给出建议：大家要把垃圾扔进垃圾桶，共同保护环境。
② 其次介绍公园摘花的行为：点明部分游客因为花好看就随手采摘，评价该行为自私且不文明，给出建议：园区可以设置提示牌提醒游客不要摘花。
③ 最后介绍公共场所大声喧哗的行为：点明部分游客在公共场合高声交谈，会打扰到周边的人，给出建议：大家在公共场合要主动放低音量。
3. 结尾总结升华：发出文明出游的倡议，点明只有人人都守礼仪，所有人才能共同享受旅途的美好。
写作过程中可使用firstly、secondly、thirdly这类衔接词让文章逻辑更清晰，控制总词数符合要求，不要添加无关的个人真实信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
Travelling in Good Manners
Nowadays, travelling is getting more and more popular. But we can see some uncivilized behaviour during travelling. Firstly, some people throw rubbish everywhere when travelling to places of interest. It's really impolite and also causes much inconvenience for other people. They should put rubbish into dustbins to protect the environment. Secondly, some people like picking flowers in the park just because they are beautiful. This is uncivilized and selfish. We can put up signs to remind people not to do that. Thirdly, there are some people speaking loudly in public places. We should also remind them to lower their voice.
In my opinion, we should travel in good manners so that everyone can enjoy the beauty of the world.
【知识点】
英语倡议类写作
文明旅游主题表达
逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干表格给出的所有核心要点，每一个不文明行为都配套了对应的观点评价和合理可行的建议，使用分层连接词让行文逻辑清晰，结构首尾呼应，完全符合英文报刊投稿的语境要求，词数也符合题干规定，没有出现任何违规的个人信息，是一篇非常规范的优秀参考范文。同学们写作时要注意优先保证所有要点不遗漏，再适当补充细节让内容更饱满。
【难度系数】
0.6
