三、写作“个人爱好”类短文参考模板

典例观摩
根据思维导图提示，简要介绍一下你的业余活动。

注意：1.词数：80词左右，文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2.表达中请勿提及真实校名及姓名。
参考词汇：surf vt. 冲浪，浏览；use n. 用途
I'm a student in Grade 8. I'm fond of doing lots of colourful and meaningful things.




So as you see, I always have great fun in my spare time.
范文欣赏
I'm a student in Grade 8. I'm fond of doing lots of colourful and meaningful things.
At weekends, I often do some reading. Classical Chinese novels are my favourite. I think that reading can not only improve my knowledge but also open up a whole new world to me. And surfing on the Internet is a pleasant way to relax myself. I can do a lot of activities online, such as sending emails to my friends. Travelling is another hobby of mine. It can help me enjoy the beauty of nature and learn better about our country. Usually, my father drives me to some places of interest during holidays.
In my spare time, I often work as a volunteer too. Helping others gives me a sense of achievement.
So as you see, I always have great fun in my spare time.
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，运用所学词汇和句式，生动描绘了自己的业余活动，展现了作者通过各种有意义的活动愉悦身心、助人为乐、提升自我的过程。作者用词准确，文笔流畅，有较好的语言学习基础和运用表达能力。
·亮点词汇：open up a whole new world; relax myself; enjoy the beauty of nature; places of interest等。
·高分句式：I think that reading can not only improve my knowledge but also open up a whole new world to me.引导的宾语从句
It can help me enjoy the beauty of nature and learn better about our country.后面的宾语补足语可以是不带to的不定式

At weekends, I often do some reading. Classical Chinese novels are my favourite. I think that reading can not only improve my knowledge but also open up a whole new world to me. And surfing on the Internet is a pleasant way to relax myself. I can do a lot of activities online, such as sending emails to my friends. Travelling is another hobby of mine. It can help me enjoy the beauty of nature and learn better about our country. Usually, my father drives me to some places of interest during holidays.
In my spare time, I often work as a volunteer too. Helping others gives me a sense of achievement.

【分析】首先明确题目要求：需围绕“个人业余活动”写80词左右的短文，开头结尾已给出，不能提及真实信息，需运用参考词汇。解题思路：1. 确定写作内容：选取符合八年级学生的业余活动（阅读、上网、旅行、志愿）；2. 结构安排：中间段分述不同活动，补充各活动的意义，让内容充实；3. 句式运用：使用高分句式（如not only...but also...、宾语从句）提升表达；4. 控制词数，符合要求，规避真实信息。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 承接开头，介绍周末的阅读爱好，说明阅读对知识和视野的作用；2. 介绍上网的爱好，明确其作为放松方式的功能；3. 介绍旅行爱好，说明旅行对感受自然、了解国家的意义；4. 补充志愿活动，体现助人为乐的价值；5. 衔接结尾，确保内容连贯，词数符合要求，不涉及真实信息。
【答案】At weekends, I often do some reading. Classical Chinese novels are my favourite. I think that reading can not only improve my knowledge but also open up a whole new world to me. And surfing on the Internet is a pleasant way to relax myself. I can do a lot of activities online, such as sending emails to my friends. Travelling is another hobby of mine. It can help me enjoy the beauty of nature and learn better about our country. Usually, my father drives me to some places of interest during holidays.
In my spare time, I often work as a volunteer too. Helping others gives me a sense of achievement.
【知识点】英语写作（个人爱好类）；英语常用句式运用；英语词汇运用
【点评】作者紧扣题目要求，围绕个人业余活动展开，结构清晰，内容充实；运用了not only...but also...等高分句式，用词准确，展现了积极向上的业余生活，符合八年级学生的写作水平，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】0.6