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钱学森是我国享誉海内外的杰出科学家。1939年他在美国获得博士学位。心系祖国的他，不顾美国阻拦，于1955年历尽千辛万苦终于回到中国，为我国的航天事业和导弹事业做出了巨大贡献。假如明天英语课的主题是“A Famous Person in China”，请根据下面的思维导图，写一篇英语短文介绍钱学森。
A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is...
钱学森是我国享誉海内外的杰出科学家。1939年他在美国获得博士学位。心系祖国的他，不顾美国阻拦，于1955年历尽千辛万苦终于回到中国，为我国的航天事业和导弹事业做出了巨大贡献。假如明天英语课的主题是“A Famous Person in China”，请根据下面的思维导图，写一篇英语短文介绍钱学森。
A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is...
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A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest
scientists in China.
Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He was so talented that he got high
marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University.
Five years later, he got a doctor's degree in the USA. Although America tried all the
ways to stop him from going back to China, he finally made it in 1955. Then he spent
the rest of his life developing and producing missiles. People consider him the "father
of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
I think Qian is not only a great scientist but also a patriotic hero for Chinese
missile and rocket career. He is worth remembering for his great contributions. Qian's
experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest
scientists in China.
Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He was so talented that he got high
marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University.
Five years later, he got a doctor's degree in the USA. Although America tried all the
ways to stop him from going back to China, he finally made it in 1955. Then he spent
the rest of his life developing and producing missiles. People consider him the "father
of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
I think Qian is not only a great scientist but also a patriotic hero for Chinese
missile and rocket career. He is worth remembering for his great contributions. Qian's
experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇人物介绍类英语作文，写作思路为：首先点明要介绍的人物是钱学森；接着按照思维导图的模块，依次介绍他的生卒年、学习经历、回国后的贡献、获得的荣誉；最后结合自身表达对钱学森的评价及他带来的影响，确保内容覆盖思维导图所有要点，语言通顺符合英语表达习惯。
【解析】
1. 开头引出介绍对象：The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest scientists in China.
2. 介绍生卒年与学习经历：Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He got high marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University. In 1939, he got a doctor's degree in the USA.
3. 讲述回国与贡献：Although America tried to stop him, he returned to China in 1955. Then he spent his life developing and producing missiles.
4. 说明荣誉：People call him "father of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
5. 加入个人评价与影响：I think he is a great scientist and patriotic hero. His experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
【答案】
A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest scientists in China.
Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He was so talented that he got high marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University. Five years later, he got a doctor's degree in the USA. Although America tried all the ways to stop him from going back to China, he finally made it in 1955. Then he spent the rest of his life developing and producing missiles. People consider him the "father of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
I think Qian is not only a great scientist but also a patriotic hero for Chinese missile and rocket career. He is worth remembering for his great contributions. Qian's experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
【知识点】
英语人物介绍写作、思维导图信息整合、英语句子表达
【点评】
范文紧扣思维导图所有要点，内容完整，逻辑清晰，语言流畅自然，准确传达了钱学森的生平、贡献与荣誉，结尾加入个人评价升华主题，符合英语写作的规范要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
这是一篇人物介绍类英语作文，写作思路为：首先点明要介绍的人物是钱学森；接着按照思维导图的模块，依次介绍他的生卒年、学习经历、回国后的贡献、获得的荣誉；最后结合自身表达对钱学森的评价及他带来的影响，确保内容覆盖思维导图所有要点，语言通顺符合英语表达习惯。
【解析】
1. 开头引出介绍对象：The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest scientists in China.
2. 介绍生卒年与学习经历：Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He got high marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University. In 1939, he got a doctor's degree in the USA.
3. 讲述回国与贡献：Although America tried to stop him, he returned to China in 1955. Then he spent his life developing and producing missiles.
4. 说明荣誉：People call him "father of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
5. 加入个人评价与影响：I think he is a great scientist and patriotic hero. His experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
【答案】
A Famous Person in China
The famous person I want to introduce is Qian Xuesen. He is one of the greatest scientists in China.
Qian was born in 1911 and died in 2009. He was so talented that he got high marks in every subject. In 1934, he graduated from Shanghai Jiao Tong University. Five years later, he got a doctor's degree in the USA. Although America tried all the ways to stop him from going back to China, he finally made it in 1955. Then he spent the rest of his life developing and producing missiles. People consider him the "father of China's aerospace" and "king of rockets".
I think Qian is not only a great scientist but also a patriotic hero for Chinese missile and rocket career. He is worth remembering for his great contributions. Qian's experience inspires me to study hard for a stronger country.
【知识点】
英语人物介绍写作、思维导图信息整合、英语句子表达
【点评】
范文紧扣思维导图所有要点，内容完整，逻辑清晰，语言流畅自然，准确传达了钱学森的生平、贡献与荣誉，结尾加入个人评价升华主题，符合英语写作的规范要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
