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请根据内容提示以“My ideal school”为题，写一篇80词左右的短文。
内容提示：
1. 学校又大又漂亮，校园里有许多花草树木。2. 早上9点上课，没有很多家庭作业，有很多时间进行课外活动，例如…… 3. 总结。
要求：语言流畅，条理清晰，书写工整。
My ideal school
思路点拨
1. 审体裁：本文要求学生介绍自己理想中的学校，是一篇说明文。
2. 审内容：分别介绍了学校环境、学校生活和自己的感受（自我发挥1～2句）。
3. 审时态：一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅：80词左右；首尾各1句“套话”，中间用到there be句型和连接词串联，既简洁又高级。
范文欣赏
My ideal school
My ideal school is very big and beautiful. There are many tall trees and flowers in it.
I don't like getting up early, so my ideal school begins at 9: 00 in the morning. I like playing football and singing, so I want to have more time to play on the playground and join some clubs. There are about 20 students in my ideal class. We don't have much homework to do and we have lots of time for our after-school activities.
This is my ideal school. I love it very much. What about yours?
请根据内容提示以“My ideal school”为题，写一篇80词左右的短文。
内容提示：
1. 学校又大又漂亮，校园里有许多花草树木。2. 早上9点上课，没有很多家庭作业，有很多时间进行课外活动，例如…… 3. 总结。
要求：语言流畅，条理清晰，书写工整。
My ideal school
思路点拨
1. 审体裁：本文要求学生介绍自己理想中的学校，是一篇说明文。
2. 审内容：分别介绍了学校环境、学校生活和自己的感受（自我发挥1～2句）。
3. 审时态：一般现在时为主。
4. 审篇幅：80词左右；首尾各1句“套话”，中间用到there be句型和连接词串联，既简洁又高级。
范文欣赏
My ideal school
My ideal school is very big and beautiful. There are many tall trees and flowers in it.
I don't like getting up early, so my ideal school begins at 9: 00 in the morning. I like playing football and singing, so I want to have more time to play on the playground and join some clubs. There are about 20 students in my ideal class. We don't have much homework to do and we have lots of time for our after-school activities.
This is my ideal school. I love it very much. What about yours?
答案
My ideal school
My ideal school is very big and beautiful. There are many green trees and colorful flowers in the campus.
I don't like getting up early, so my ideal school begins at 9:00 in the morning. We don't have much homework to do and we have lots of time for our after-school activities, such as playing ball games on the playground and joining different hobby clubs.
This is my ideal school. I love it so much. What about your ideal school?
My ideal school is very big and beautiful. There are many green trees and colorful flowers in the campus.
I don't like getting up early, so my ideal school begins at 9:00 in the morning. We don't have much homework to do and we have lots of time for our after-school activities, such as playing ball games on the playground and joining different hobby clubs.
This is my ideal school. I love it so much. What about your ideal school?
解析
本题为译林版八年级上册的命题说明文写作，要求以"My ideal school"为题介绍自己理想中的学校，写作要求如下：1. 时态以一般现在时为主，词数控制在80词左右；2. 需覆盖全部内容提示：开篇点明理想学校又大又漂亮，使用there be句型说明校园内有大量花草树木；使用so、and等连词合并零散短句，避免表达重复，依次介绍9点上课、作业量少、有充足时间开展课外活动的设定，可适当补充课外活动的具体示例；最后收尾表达对理想学校的喜爱，完成全文即可。
巩固练习
假如你是张华,你的英国笔友 David 来信询问你的学校生活,请你根据以下要点给他写封回信。要点如下:
1. 你每天上几节课,学习哪些科目;2. 你擅长哪些科目,哪些科目学得不够好,以及课外活动情况;3. 每天花多长时间做作业,对学校生活是否满意;若不满意,你希望如何改善。
注意:词数 80 左右。信的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear David,
I'm very glad to receive your letter. You asked me about my school life in your letter. Now I'll tell you something about it.
Yours,
Zhang Hua
假如你是张华,你的英国笔友 David 来信询问你的学校生活,请你根据以下要点给他写封回信。要点如下:
1. 你每天上几节课,学习哪些科目;2. 你擅长哪些科目,哪些科目学得不够好,以及课外活动情况;3. 每天花多长时间做作业,对学校生活是否满意;若不满意,你希望如何改善。
注意:词数 80 左右。信的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear David,
I'm very glad to receive your letter. You asked me about my school life in your letter. Now I'll tell you something about it.
Yours,
Zhang Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear David,
I'm very glad to receive your letter. You asked me about my school life in your letter. Now I'll tell you something about it.
I'm a secondary school student in Jiangsu. I study Chinese, Maths, English, Geography, Art, Music and other subjects. Classes begin at 7:45 a. m. We have four classes in the morning and three in the afternoon. I study hard. I'm good at Chinese and English but don't do so well in Maths. I'm going to work harder. We have a lot of after-school activities here. We often play football, basketball or volleyball from 4:00 to 5:00 p. m. We can also go to some school clubs. We can gain more knowledge there. I usually spend an hour on my homework.
→spend time on sth 在某事/物上花费时间。
I think my school life is colourful.
Yours,
Zhang Hua
Dear David,
I'm very glad to receive your letter. You asked me about my school life in your letter. Now I'll tell you something about it.
I'm a secondary school student in Jiangsu. I study Chinese, Maths, English, Geography, Art, Music and other subjects. Classes begin at 7:45 a. m. We have four classes in the morning and three in the afternoon. I study hard. I'm good at Chinese and English but don't do so well in Maths. I'm going to work harder. We have a lot of after-school activities here. We often play football, basketball or volleyball from 4:00 to 5:00 p. m. We can also go to some school clubs. We can gain more knowledge there. I usually spend an hour on my homework.
→spend time on sth 在某事/物上花费时间。
I think my school life is colourful.
Yours,
Zhang Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确写作类型是写给笔友的日常回信，主题为介绍个人学校生活，题干已经给出首尾段，仅需填充中间主体内容。接下来我们要逐一对应题干给出的三个要点，避免漏点：第一部分先交代每日的课程数量、所学的各类科目，完成第一个要点；第二部分接着说明自己擅长的科目、有待提升的薄弱科目，再介绍学校的课外活动安排，完成第二个要点；第三部分说明每日完成作业的时长，最后表达自己对校园生活的感受，完成第三个要点。写作时要使用自然的书信交流语气，多用初中阶段学过的常用固定短语，控制总词数在80左右，保证逻辑连贯、无语法错误即可。
【解析】
我们按照要点顺序逐步组织通顺的内容：
1. 先简单介绍自身身份，列举所学的语文、数学、英语等科目，说明上午4节课、下午3节课的课时安排，覆盖第一个要点；
2. 接着说明自己擅长语文和英语，数学科目还需要努力提升，之后介绍学校丰富的课后活动，比如球类运动、各类校园社团，覆盖第二个要点；
3. 最后说明自己每天花费1小时完成作业，表达自己认为校园生活丰富多彩的感受，覆盖第三个要点。
组织语言时注意正确使用be good at、spend time on sth等固定搭配，符合日常书信的表达习惯，整体流畅自然。
【答案】
I'm a secondary school student in Jiangsu. I study Chinese, Maths, English, Geography, Art, Music and other subjects. Classes begin at 7:45 a. m. We have four classes in the morning and three in the afternoon. I study hard. I'm good at Chinese and English but don't do so well in Maths. I'm going to work harder. We have a lot of after-school activities here. We often play football, basketball or volleyball from 4:00 to 5:00 p. m. We can also go to some school clubs. We can gain more knowledge there. I usually spend an hour on my homework. I think my school life is colourful.
【知识点】
英文书信写作，校园话题表达，固定短语运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常学习生活的基础应用文写作，难度较低，写作时只要按照题干给出的要点顺序依次展开，不遗漏关键信息，正确运用所学的描述校园生活的常用表达，就能写出符合要求的短文，能够有效巩固学生基础话题的英语写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先明确写作类型是写给笔友的日常回信，主题为介绍个人学校生活，题干已经给出首尾段，仅需填充中间主体内容。接下来我们要逐一对应题干给出的三个要点，避免漏点：第一部分先交代每日的课程数量、所学的各类科目，完成第一个要点；第二部分接着说明自己擅长的科目、有待提升的薄弱科目，再介绍学校的课外活动安排，完成第二个要点；第三部分说明每日完成作业的时长，最后表达自己对校园生活的感受，完成第三个要点。写作时要使用自然的书信交流语气，多用初中阶段学过的常用固定短语，控制总词数在80左右，保证逻辑连贯、无语法错误即可。
【解析】
我们按照要点顺序逐步组织通顺的内容：
1. 先简单介绍自身身份，列举所学的语文、数学、英语等科目，说明上午4节课、下午3节课的课时安排，覆盖第一个要点；
2. 接着说明自己擅长语文和英语，数学科目还需要努力提升，之后介绍学校丰富的课后活动，比如球类运动、各类校园社团，覆盖第二个要点；
3. 最后说明自己每天花费1小时完成作业，表达自己认为校园生活丰富多彩的感受，覆盖第三个要点。
组织语言时注意正确使用be good at、spend time on sth等固定搭配，符合日常书信的表达习惯，整体流畅自然。
【答案】
I'm a secondary school student in Jiangsu. I study Chinese, Maths, English, Geography, Art, Music and other subjects. Classes begin at 7:45 a. m. We have four classes in the morning and three in the afternoon. I study hard. I'm good at Chinese and English but don't do so well in Maths. I'm going to work harder. We have a lot of after-school activities here. We often play football, basketball or volleyball from 4:00 to 5:00 p. m. We can also go to some school clubs. We can gain more knowledge there. I usually spend an hour on my homework. I think my school life is colourful.
【知识点】
英文书信写作，校园话题表达，固定短语运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常学习生活的基础应用文写作，难度较低，写作时只要按照题干给出的要点顺序依次展开，不遗漏关键信息，正确运用所学的描述校园生活的常用表达，就能写出符合要求的短文，能够有效巩固学生基础话题的英语写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
