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假设你是李华，请根据以下信息给你的笔友杰克(Jack)写封电子邮件，表达你接受了他的建议，在生活中坚持自己的爱好，每周练习篮球。
要点:1. 介绍你打篮球的情况。2. 说一说篮球这项运动给你带来的好处。
注意:1. 词数80左右，已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
假设你是李华，请根据以下信息给你的笔友杰克(Jack)写封电子邮件，表达你接受了他的建议，在生活中坚持自己的爱好，每周练习篮球。
要点:1. 介绍你打篮球的情况。2. 说一说篮球这项运动给你带来的好处。
注意:1. 词数80左右，已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
答案
Dear Jack,
How is everything going? I have followed your advice and keep my hobby of playing basketball now.
I practise basketball with my classmates after school every Wednesday and Friday, and I also spend an hour playing it at weekends. It brings me lots of good changes. First, it makes me strong and I seldom fall ill now. Second, I make many new friends through the game. What's more, it helps me relax after busy school study.
Thank you for your great advice! Welcome to play basketball with me if you come to China.
Yours,
Li Hua
How is everything going? I have followed your advice and keep my hobby of playing basketball now.
I practise basketball with my classmates after school every Wednesday and Friday, and I also spend an hour playing it at weekends. It brings me lots of good changes. First, it makes me strong and I seldom fall ill now. Second, I make many new friends through the game. What's more, it helps me relax after busy school study.
Thank you for your great advice! Welcome to play basketball with me if you come to China.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
本题要求以李华的身份给笔友杰克写电子邮件，属于英语应用文写作题。解题思路：1. 遵循英文电子邮件的标准格式（称呼、正文、结尾、署名）；2. 紧扣两个核心要点：一是介绍自己打篮球的具体情况（练习时间、参与人员等），二是阐述篮球带来的益处；3. 注意词数要求，适当补充细节让行文连贯，语言符合中学生英语表达水平。
【解析】
1. 开头问候并点明接受杰克建议，坚持打篮球的爱好；2. 具体说明打篮球的安排：每周三、周五放学后和同学练习，周末也会花一小时打球；3. 分点阐述篮球的好处：增强体质（很少生病）、结交新朋友、缓解学习压力；4. 结尾感谢建议并邀请杰克来中国时一起打球，礼貌收尾。
【答案】
Dear Jack,
How is everything going? I have followed your advice and keep my hobby of playing basketball now.
I practise basketball with my classmates after school every Wednesday and Friday, and I also spend an hour playing it at weekends. It brings me lots of good changes. First, it makes me strong and I seldom fall ill now. Second, I make many new friends through the game. What's more, it helps me relax after busy school study.
Thank you for your great advice! Welcome to play basketball with me if you come to China.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点覆盖、语言连贯
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语应用文写作能力，要求学生准确运用邮件格式，紧扣要点表达，语言流畅自然，难度适中，能有效考查中学生的英语综合运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以李华的身份给笔友杰克写电子邮件，属于英语应用文写作题。解题思路：1. 遵循英文电子邮件的标准格式（称呼、正文、结尾、署名）；2. 紧扣两个核心要点：一是介绍自己打篮球的具体情况（练习时间、参与人员等），二是阐述篮球带来的益处；3. 注意词数要求，适当补充细节让行文连贯，语言符合中学生英语表达水平。
【解析】
1. 开头问候并点明接受杰克建议，坚持打篮球的爱好；2. 具体说明打篮球的安排：每周三、周五放学后和同学练习，周末也会花一小时打球；3. 分点阐述篮球的好处：增强体质（很少生病）、结交新朋友、缓解学习压力；4. 结尾感谢建议并邀请杰克来中国时一起打球，礼貌收尾。
【答案】
Dear Jack,
How is everything going? I have followed your advice and keep my hobby of playing basketball now.
I practise basketball with my classmates after school every Wednesday and Friday, and I also spend an hour playing it at weekends. It brings me lots of good changes. First, it makes me strong and I seldom fall ill now. Second, I make many new friends through the game. What's more, it helps me relax after busy school study.
Thank you for your great advice! Welcome to play basketball with me if you come to China.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点覆盖、语言连贯
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语应用文写作能力，要求学生准确运用邮件格式，紧扣要点表达，语言流畅自然，难度适中，能有效考查中学生的英语综合运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
[名师点评]
文章行文连贯,条理清晰,先表达对Jack的建议的感谢,接着说明自己对篮球的喜爱以及打篮球的情况,强调运动的好处,最后表达对Jack回复邮件的期望。
① 用词准确,favourite和especially自然流畅地引出文章核心内容。
② 语言风格平实、直接,把不能每天练习篮球的原因交代得清楚明了。
③ 使用 be good for 和“make sb. + adj.”,表达了自己对篮球的喜爱及对运动的积极态度。
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. I like painting. （个人爱好,下同）
2. He is a fan of science.
3. Listening to music is my hobby.
4. He thinks science is very cool. （个人看法）
[中间句]
1. In his free time, Daniel reads many science books. （个人行为,下同）
2. At home, he likes to take things apart and learn how they work.
3. It makes me feel happy. （情感影响）
4. We enjoy sharing our paintings and talking about art. （共同爱好）
5. It's my favourite sport because it's very interesting. （爱好原因）
[结尾句]
1. He wants to be a scientist one day. （未来理想,下同）
2. I would like to design beautiful clothes in the future.
3. I hope my dream can come true. （个人愿望）
4. I think I am able to do them better. （自我展望）
5. It's good for my health. （益处说明）
[名言警句]
1. Where there is no hobby, there is no interest. 没有爱好,就没有兴趣。
2. Each man has his own hobby. 人各有所好。
3. Hobbies make life colourful. 爱好让生活多姿多彩。
4. Hobbies are the best way to relax. 爱好是最好的放松方式。
5. Interest is the best teacher. 兴趣是最好的老师。
写作演练＞＞
假设你是李雷,请你根据以下问题写一篇英语短文来介绍你的爱好。
问题:1. What is your favourite hobby? 2. Why do you have this hobby? 3. What do you think of your hobby?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般过去时和一般现在时。② 人称:以第一人称为主。③ 描述你的爱好是什么、你是如何培养爱好的以及你的爱好给你带来了什么好处。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
文章行文连贯,条理清晰,先表达对Jack的建议的感谢,接着说明自己对篮球的喜爱以及打篮球的情况,强调运动的好处,最后表达对Jack回复邮件的期望。
① 用词准确,favourite和especially自然流畅地引出文章核心内容。
② 语言风格平实、直接,把不能每天练习篮球的原因交代得清楚明了。
③ 使用 be good for 和“make sb. + adj.”,表达了自己对篮球的喜爱及对运动的积极态度。
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. I like painting. （个人爱好,下同）
2. He is a fan of science.
3. Listening to music is my hobby.
4. He thinks science is very cool. （个人看法）
[中间句]
1. In his free time, Daniel reads many science books. （个人行为,下同）
2. At home, he likes to take things apart and learn how they work.
3. It makes me feel happy. （情感影响）
4. We enjoy sharing our paintings and talking about art. （共同爱好）
5. It's my favourite sport because it's very interesting. （爱好原因）
[结尾句]
1. He wants to be a scientist one day. （未来理想,下同）
2. I would like to design beautiful clothes in the future.
3. I hope my dream can come true. （个人愿望）
4. I think I am able to do them better. （自我展望）
5. It's good for my health. （益处说明）
[名言警句]
1. Where there is no hobby, there is no interest. 没有爱好,就没有兴趣。
2. Each man has his own hobby. 人各有所好。
3. Hobbies make life colourful. 爱好让生活多姿多彩。
4. Hobbies are the best way to relax. 爱好是最好的放松方式。
5. Interest is the best teacher. 兴趣是最好的老师。
写作演练＞＞
假设你是李雷,请你根据以下问题写一篇英语短文来介绍你的爱好。
问题:1. What is your favourite hobby? 2. Why do you have this hobby? 3. What do you think of your hobby?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般过去时和一般现在时。② 人称:以第一人称为主。③ 描述你的爱好是什么、你是如何培养爱好的以及你的爱好给你带来了什么好处。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
答案
One possible version:
Playing football is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in my life.
I started to play with the ball at the age of four and I thought it was very interesting. When I went to primary school, I began to learn to play football in a team. Now it is my favourite hobby.
Playing football not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun. Also, I make friends with others by playing football with them.
Playing football is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in my life.
I started to play with the ball at the age of four and I thought it was very interesting. When I went to primary school, I began to learn to play football in a team. Now it is my favourite hobby.
Playing football not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun. Also, I make friends with others by playing football with them.
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作要求：以李雷的身份介绍爱好，需回答“爱好是什么、为什么有、怎么看”三个问题，结合给定的三段式要点（第一段点明爱好及重要性，第二段讲述爱好的起源与学习过程，第三段说明爱好的益处）。解题思路：1. 确定具体爱好（如足球），第一段用一般现在时说明爱好及在生活中的重要性；2. 第二段用一般过去时讲述接触爱好的时间、学习经历，对应要点的“started to...began to learn...”结构；3. 第三段用一般现在时说明爱好的益处，结合“not only...but also...”结构，补充额外好处使内容更丰富，符合要求。
【解析】
按照三段式结构规范写作：
1. 第一段：点明爱好，说明其重要性，用一般现在时，对应要点的“...is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in...”；
2. 第二段：讲述爱好的起源与学习过程，用一般过去时，对应要点的“I started to... I began to learn...”；
3. 第三段：说明爱好的益处，用“not only...but also...”结构，补充额外益处，对应要点的“...not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun...”。
【答案】
One possible version:
Playing football is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in my life.
I started to play with the ball at the age of four and I thought it was very interesting. When I went to primary school, I began to learn to play football in a team. Now it is my favourite hobby.
Playing football not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun. Also, I make friends with others by playing football with them.
【知识点】
英语短文写作、时态运用、要点整合
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，三段对应写作要点；时态运用准确（一般现在时表现状，一般过去时讲经历）；语言流畅，使用“not only...but also...”丰富表达，补充交朋友的益处使内容更充实，符合初中英语写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
首先明确写作要求：以李雷的身份介绍爱好，需回答“爱好是什么、为什么有、怎么看”三个问题，结合给定的三段式要点（第一段点明爱好及重要性，第二段讲述爱好的起源与学习过程，第三段说明爱好的益处）。解题思路：1. 确定具体爱好（如足球），第一段用一般现在时说明爱好及在生活中的重要性；2. 第二段用一般过去时讲述接触爱好的时间、学习经历，对应要点的“started to...began to learn...”结构；3. 第三段用一般现在时说明爱好的益处，结合“not only...but also...”结构，补充额外好处使内容更丰富，符合要求。
【解析】
按照三段式结构规范写作：
1. 第一段：点明爱好，说明其重要性，用一般现在时，对应要点的“...is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in...”；
2. 第二段：讲述爱好的起源与学习过程，用一般过去时，对应要点的“I started to... I began to learn...”；
3. 第三段：说明爱好的益处，用“not only...but also...”结构，补充额外益处，对应要点的“...not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun...”。
【答案】
One possible version:
Playing football is my favourite hobby. It plays an important role in my life.
I started to play with the ball at the age of four and I thought it was very interesting. When I went to primary school, I began to learn to play football in a team. Now it is my favourite hobby.
Playing football not only helps me keep fit, but also brings me lots of fun. Also, I make friends with others by playing football with them.
【知识点】
英语短文写作、时态运用、要点整合
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，三段对应写作要点；时态运用准确（一般现在时表现状，一般过去时讲经历）；语言流畅，使用“not only...but also...”丰富表达，补充交朋友的益处使内容更充实，符合初中英语写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
