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假如你是李华，上周五学校组织了郊游活动。请你根据以下图片及文字提示给你的英国笔友Tony写一封信，告诉他你的郊游活动经历及感受。
要求:
1. 包含提示中的所有内容，可适当发挥；
2. 词数不少于80，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词语: milk a cow 给奶牛挤奶
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
Yours,
Li Hua
范文欣赏
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，把自己一天的旅游经历进行了介绍。
在本文的写作中，作者能够运用本单元所学词汇、句式，将游览经历进行了具体的描述。如: taught us how to milk the cow、picked some strawberries、finally等词语及“It was really a day to remember!”等句式的运用，体现了作者扎实的语言基本功和语言运用能力。同时，作者在文末用we enjoyed working with our hands表达了一个中学生热爱劳动、享受生活乐趣的核心素养。
假如你是李华，上周五学校组织了郊游活动。请你根据以下图片及文字提示给你的英国笔友Tony写一封信，告诉他你的郊游活动经历及感受。
要求:
1. 包含提示中的所有内容，可适当发挥；
2. 词数不少于80，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词语: milk a cow 给奶牛挤奶
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
Yours,
Li Hua
范文欣赏
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求，把自己一天的旅游经历进行了介绍。
在本文的写作中，作者能够运用本单元所学词汇、句式，将游览经历进行了具体的描述。如: taught us how to milk the cow、picked some strawberries、finally等词语及“It was really a day to remember!”等句式的运用，体现了作者扎实的语言基本功和语言运用能力。同时，作者在文末用we enjoyed working with our hands表达了一个中学生热爱劳动、享受生活乐趣的核心素养。
答案
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
本题要求以李华的身份给英国笔友Tony写一封关于上周五学校郊游的信，需结合图片提示的三个核心维度（How：交通方式；Where：地点；What：活动）完成写作。解题思路：1. 明确书信格式，开头和结尾已给出，只需补充中间主体内容；2. 梳理图片信息：郊游地点是农场，交通方式为坐公交，活动包含喂羊、挤牛奶、钓鱼、骑马、摘草莓、浇植物；3. 采用一般过去时叙述经历，适当添加细节（如距离、行程耗时）丰富内容，最后表达真实感受，确保符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 承接已给开头，说明郊游地点（农场）、距离学校的远近及交通方式（by bus），补充行程耗时使内容更具体；2. 按时间顺序叙述活动：上午完成喂羊、挤牛奶（用到提示词milk a cow），下午依次进行钓鱼、骑马、摘草莓、浇植物；3. 结尾表达感受，用“tiring but enjoyable”体现积极态度，以“It was really a day to remember!”总结，符合书信结尾要求。
【答案】
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信写作、一般过去时、词汇运用
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有提示信息，结构清晰，时态准确，语言自然流畅，合理添加细节丰富内容，结尾的情感表达积极向上，体现了良好的语言运用能力和核心素养，是符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以李华的身份给英国笔友Tony写一封关于上周五学校郊游的信，需结合图片提示的三个核心维度（How：交通方式；Where：地点；What：活动）完成写作。解题思路：1. 明确书信格式，开头和结尾已给出，只需补充中间主体内容；2. 梳理图片信息：郊游地点是农场，交通方式为坐公交，活动包含喂羊、挤牛奶、钓鱼、骑马、摘草莓、浇植物；3. 采用一般过去时叙述经历，适当添加细节（如距离、行程耗时）丰富内容，最后表达真实感受，确保符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 承接已给开头，说明郊游地点（农场）、距离学校的远近及交通方式（by bus），补充行程耗时使内容更具体；2. 按时间顺序叙述活动：上午完成喂羊、挤牛奶（用到提示词milk a cow），下午依次进行钓鱼、骑马、摘草莓、浇植物；3. 结尾表达感受，用“tiring but enjoyable”体现积极态度，以“It was really a day to remember!”总结，符合书信结尾要求。
【答案】
Dear Tony,
Last Friday we went on a school trip.
We went to a farm. It is about 20 kilometres away from our school. So we went there by bus. It took us about half an hour to get there. When we got there, we fed the sheep. And the farmer taught us how to milk the cow. It was so interesting. In the afternoon, we went fishing and rode horses. We also picked some strawberries.
Finally, we watered the plants.
It was tiring but we enjoyed working with our hands. It was really a day to remember!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语书信写作、一般过去时、词汇运用
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有提示信息，结构清晰，时态准确，语言自然流畅，合理添加细节丰富内容，结尾的情感表达积极向上，体现了良好的语言运用能力和核心素养，是符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
