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每个人都有业余爱好，有益的业余爱好不但可以陶冶情操、增强体质、放松身心，还能让我们在学习或工作时精力更充沛、效率更高。作为一名中学生，你在忙碌的学习之余都做些什么呢？请根据以下提示写一篇60~70词的短文，谈一谈你的业余爱好。
要点提示：
1. 你的业余爱好是什么；2. 重点讲述与你的业余爱好有关的一次经历；
3. 你的业余爱好对你的学习和生活的影响。
审题指导：
1. 体裁：记叙文
2. 时态：一般现在时
3. 人称：第一人称为主
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My hobby
There are many hobbies to choose from¹. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on² music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a team to play basketball in our school sports club. We often play against other teams. Everyone tries their best³ to win.
Playing basketball is a good way to keep healthy and relax myself.⁴ And it is helpful for my study. But I will always remember that it's not good to spend too much time playing.⁵
Do you like playing basketball? Join us.
亮点词块
① choose from 从……中选择
② spend one’s time on... 某人花费时间在……上
③ try one’s best 尽某人全力
高分句子
④ Playing basketball is a good way to keep healthy and relax myself. ( a good way to...) 打篮球是保持健康和放松自我的好办法。
⑤ But I will always remember that it’s not good to spend too much time on playing. (it’s + adj. + to do sth) 但我会永远记得，花太多时间在玩乐上是不可取的。
每个人都有业余爱好，有益的业余爱好不但可以陶冶情操、增强体质、放松身心，还能让我们在学习或工作时精力更充沛、效率更高。作为一名中学生，你在忙碌的学习之余都做些什么呢？请根据以下提示写一篇60~70词的短文，谈一谈你的业余爱好。
要点提示：
1. 你的业余爱好是什么；2. 重点讲述与你的业余爱好有关的一次经历；
3. 你的业余爱好对你的学习和生活的影响。
审题指导：
1. 体裁：记叙文
2. 时态：一般现在时
3. 人称：第一人称为主
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My hobby
There are many hobbies to choose from¹. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on² music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a team to play basketball in our school sports club. We often play against other teams. Everyone tries their best³ to win.
Playing basketball is a good way to keep healthy and relax myself.⁴ And it is helpful for my study. But I will always remember that it's not good to spend too much time playing.⁵
Do you like playing basketball? Join us.
亮点词块
① choose from 从……中选择
② spend one’s time on... 某人花费时间在……上
③ try one’s best 尽某人全力
高分句子
④ Playing basketball is a good way to keep healthy and relax myself. ( a good way to...) 打篮球是保持健康和放松自我的好办法。
⑤ But I will always remember that it’s not good to spend too much time on playing. (it’s + adj. + to do sth) 但我会永远记得，花太多时间在玩乐上是不可取的。
答案
My hobby
There are many hobbies to choose from. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a basketball team in our school sports club. We often play against other teams, and everyone tries their best to win.
Playing basketball helps me keep healthy and relax myself, and it is also helpful for my study. But I remember it's not good to spend too much time playing.
Do you like basketball? Join us.
There are many hobbies to choose from. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a basketball team in our school sports club. We often play against other teams, and everyone tries their best to win.
Playing basketball helps me keep healthy and relax myself, and it is also helpful for my study. But I remember it's not good to spend too much time playing.
Do you like basketball? Join us.
解析
【分析】
本题是英语写作题，要求根据给定的思维导图和要点提示写一篇60~70词的短文，主题为业余爱好。解题思路：首先明确写作要求——体裁为记叙文，时态用一般现在时，以第一人称为主；其次按照思维导图的结构分三部分展开：开篇点题（点明爱好是打篮球）、详细阐述（加入学校篮球队的经历、爱好对健康、放松及学习的影响，补充注意不要花太多时间）、结尾邀请他人加入；写作时需运用给定的亮点词块，确保覆盖所有要点，语言准确连贯，符合词数要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇：用“There are many hobbies to choose from”引出话题，点明“My hobby is playing basketball”，完成开篇点题；
2. 中间：先写加入学校体育俱乐部的篮球队，和其他队伍比赛，大家尽力争取胜利，对应“Join a team...”；接着说明打球的好处：帮助保持健康、放松自我，对学习有帮助，对应“Keep healthy and relax myself”“Helpful for my study”，补充“不要花太多时间”的合理提醒，让内容更完整；
3. 结尾：用“Join us”呼应思维导图，邀请他人加入，完成收尾。全程使用一般现在时，第一人称，控制词数在要求范围内，运用了choose from、spend time on、try one's best等亮点词块，符合写作要求。
【答案】
My hobby
There are many hobbies to choose from. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a basketball team in our school sports club. We often play against other teams, and everyone tries their best to win.
Playing basketball helps me keep healthy and relax myself, and it is also helpful for my study. But I remember it's not good to spend too much time playing.
Do you like basketball? Join us.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题结合思维导图框架明确写作结构，要求学生围绕业余爱好展开，覆盖核心要点，注重语言的准确性和逻辑性，能帮助中学生巩固英语写作的基本方法，同时引导学生树立合理安排课余时间的观念，是典型的英语写作练习题目。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题是英语写作题，要求根据给定的思维导图和要点提示写一篇60~70词的短文，主题为业余爱好。解题思路：首先明确写作要求——体裁为记叙文，时态用一般现在时，以第一人称为主；其次按照思维导图的结构分三部分展开：开篇点题（点明爱好是打篮球）、详细阐述（加入学校篮球队的经历、爱好对健康、放松及学习的影响，补充注意不要花太多时间）、结尾邀请他人加入；写作时需运用给定的亮点词块，确保覆盖所有要点，语言准确连贯，符合词数要求。
【解析】
1. 开篇：用“There are many hobbies to choose from”引出话题，点明“My hobby is playing basketball”，完成开篇点题；
2. 中间：先写加入学校体育俱乐部的篮球队，和其他队伍比赛，大家尽力争取胜利，对应“Join a team...”；接着说明打球的好处：帮助保持健康、放松自我，对学习有帮助，对应“Keep healthy and relax myself”“Helpful for my study”，补充“不要花太多时间”的合理提醒，让内容更完整；
3. 结尾：用“Join us”呼应思维导图，邀请他人加入，完成收尾。全程使用一般现在时，第一人称，控制词数在要求范围内，运用了choose from、spend time on、try one's best等亮点词块，符合写作要求。
【答案】
My hobby
There are many hobbies to choose from. Some people enjoy collecting stamps while others choose to spend their time on music. My hobby is playing basketball.
I join a basketball team in our school sports club. We often play against other teams, and everyone tries their best to win.
Playing basketball helps me keep healthy and relax myself, and it is also helpful for my study. But I remember it's not good to spend too much time playing.
Do you like basketball? Join us.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题结合思维导图框架明确写作结构，要求学生围绕业余爱好展开，覆盖核心要点，注重语言的准确性和逻辑性，能帮助中学生巩固英语写作的基本方法，同时引导学生树立合理安排课余时间的观念，是典型的英语写作练习题目。
【难度系数】
0.5
