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二、书面表达。
假如你是张华,你将参加校报以"A good way to relax"为主题的征文活动。请根据以下信息,结合自身体验,选择"做手工"作为放松方式,写一篇稿件。
提示:1.你如何通过做手工来放松?
(时间、地点、和谁一起……)
2.你觉得做手工有哪些好处?
(保持健康、开阔眼界、培养耐心……)
注意:词数80—100。 参考词汇:handicraft 手工
假如你是张华,你将参加校报以"A good way to relax"为主题的征文活动。请根据以下信息,结合自身体验,选择"做手工"作为放松方式,写一篇稿件。
提示:1.你如何通过做手工来放松?
(时间、地点、和谁一起……)
2.你觉得做手工有哪些好处?
(保持健康、开阔眼界、培养耐心……)
注意:词数80—100。 参考词汇:handicraft 手工
答案
One possible version:
When it comes to a good way to relax, I think
making handicrafts is my best choice. I usually
make handicrafts in my free time, especially on
weekends. Sometimes I do it alone, and sometimes
with my friends. We often get together in my home,
sharing different materials and ideas.
Making handicrafts is really a wonderful
experience. It can help me relax after a busy week
of study. When I focus on creating a handicraft, all
my stress seems to disappear. Moreover, it helps me
develop patience and creativity. Every time I finish
a handicraft, I feel a great sense of achievement. It's
really a good way to keep myself healthy both
physically and mentally.
When it comes to a good way to relax, I think
making handicrafts is my best choice. I usually
make handicrafts in my free time, especially on
weekends. Sometimes I do it alone, and sometimes
with my friends. We often get together in my home,
sharing different materials and ideas.
Making handicrafts is really a wonderful
experience. It can help me relax after a busy week
of study. When I focus on creating a handicraft, all
my stress seems to disappear. Moreover, it helps me
develop patience and creativity. Every time I finish
a handicraft, I feel a great sense of achievement. It's
really a good way to keep myself healthy both
physically and mentally.
解析
【分析】
首先第一步先审题，明确写作核心要求：身份是张华，征文主题为"A good way to relax"，选定放松方式为做手工，词数要求80-100，必须覆盖两个核心提示点：一是自己做手工放松的具体场景（时间、地点、同行人员等），二是做手工的相关好处。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开篇直接点题，说明做手工是自己最爱的放松方式；接着介绍日常做手工的实际场景，比如周末空闲时间，有时独自在家有时和好友结伴，分享材料和创意；之后结合自身学习体验阐述做手工的好处，比如消解学习压力、培养耐心、获得成就感、助力身心健康，最后收尾呼应主题即可，全程注意使用第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，合理使用参考词汇handicraft。
【解析】
1. 审题定调：确定文体为主题征文，人称使用第一人称，主体时态为一般现在时，确保所有题干给出的要点都不遗漏，词数控制在80-100区间内。
2. 搭建结构：
第一段：开篇点题，引出做手工是我首选的放松方式，交代日常做手工的时间（周末空闲）、地点（家中）、同行人员（有时独自，有时和朋友）的细节，补充和朋友一起做手工时分享材料、交流想法的小细节，让内容更真实。
第二段：阐述做手工的好处，结合自身学习经历说明忙碌一周后做手工可以消解压力，同时能培养耐心与创造力，完成作品后能获得成就感，实现身心双重健康，最后再次点题呼应征文主题。
3. 润色优化：适当使用过渡连接词如when it comes to、moreover等，让行文逻辑更顺畅，规避语法错误，符合征文的表达风格。
【答案】
One possible version:
When it comes to a good way to relax, I think making handicrafts is my best choice. I usually make handicrafts in my free time, especially on weekends. Sometimes I do it alone, and sometimes with my friends. We often get together in my home, sharing different materials and ideas.
Making handicrafts is really a wonderful experience. It can help me relax after a busy week of study. When I focus on creating a handicraft, all my stress seems to disappear. Moreover, it helps me develop patience and creativity. Every time I finish a handicraft, I feel a great sense of achievement. It's really a good way to keep myself healthy both physically and mentally.
【知识点】
英语主题征文写作
要点式作文谋篇
英语时态运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段典型的提示类半开放书面表达题，题干给出了明确的写作方向和核心要点，学生只需要结合自身日常体验补充合理细节，就可以完成符合要求的稿件。写作时要注意不要遗漏题干给出的两个核心提示点，控制词数在规定区间，适当使用过渡词可以让行文更流畅，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先第一步先审题，明确写作核心要求：身份是张华，征文主题为"A good way to relax"，选定放松方式为做手工，词数要求80-100，必须覆盖两个核心提示点：一是自己做手工放松的具体场景（时间、地点、同行人员等），二是做手工的相关好处。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开篇直接点题，说明做手工是自己最爱的放松方式；接着介绍日常做手工的实际场景，比如周末空闲时间，有时独自在家有时和好友结伴，分享材料和创意；之后结合自身学习体验阐述做手工的好处，比如消解学习压力、培养耐心、获得成就感、助力身心健康，最后收尾呼应主题即可，全程注意使用第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，合理使用参考词汇handicraft。
【解析】
1. 审题定调：确定文体为主题征文，人称使用第一人称，主体时态为一般现在时，确保所有题干给出的要点都不遗漏，词数控制在80-100区间内。
2. 搭建结构：
第一段：开篇点题，引出做手工是我首选的放松方式，交代日常做手工的时间（周末空闲）、地点（家中）、同行人员（有时独自，有时和朋友）的细节，补充和朋友一起做手工时分享材料、交流想法的小细节，让内容更真实。
第二段：阐述做手工的好处，结合自身学习经历说明忙碌一周后做手工可以消解压力，同时能培养耐心与创造力，完成作品后能获得成就感，实现身心双重健康，最后再次点题呼应征文主题。
3. 润色优化：适当使用过渡连接词如when it comes to、moreover等，让行文逻辑更顺畅，规避语法错误，符合征文的表达风格。
【答案】
One possible version:
When it comes to a good way to relax, I think making handicrafts is my best choice. I usually make handicrafts in my free time, especially on weekends. Sometimes I do it alone, and sometimes with my friends. We often get together in my home, sharing different materials and ideas.
Making handicrafts is really a wonderful experience. It can help me relax after a busy week of study. When I focus on creating a handicraft, all my stress seems to disappear. Moreover, it helps me develop patience and creativity. Every time I finish a handicraft, I feel a great sense of achievement. It's really a good way to keep myself healthy both physically and mentally.
【知识点】
英语主题征文写作
要点式作文谋篇
英语时态运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段典型的提示类半开放书面表达题，题干给出了明确的写作方向和核心要点，学生只需要结合自身日常体验补充合理细节，就可以完成符合要求的稿件。写作时要注意不要遗漏题干给出的两个核心提示点，控制词数在规定区间，适当使用过渡词可以让行文更流畅，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
